Nowadays friends play an important role in relationships and persons lives. Although some people maintain that finding a lot of new friends is better than keep a small number of them, there are others holding the view that keep a small number friends for a long time is better than finding many new ones. As far as I concern, the ability to make many new friends is more important than the ability to retain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time because not only people can make their decisions easier, but also they can specialize better.
The first reason which should be stated here is that by finding many new friend people can easily make their decisions. To begin with, it is obvious that when people have many new friend, they have many chances to choose one decision and each one in group can give their decision and at the end they can find the best decision. For example, when a group want to go party, picnic, and outside the city for having some fun, they can give their plans and choose the best one to do. In addition, when someone in group can not come for the party, there is still other decisions, and this is possible when people have many friends instead of small number of them.
The second reason which deserves some points is that people can specialize better by finding new friends. First of all, people can share their experiences, emotions, and their activities and achieve more knowledge and use their friend’s ways to become more useful member for their societies, further more people can flourish their talents by receiving their friend’s help. For example it has been seen that there were some persons in society with a lot of friends and on the other hand there were some others that have small number of friends and finally it was obvious people with a lot of friend were more successful than people with a few number of them.
Since the advantages and privileges mentioned above it is strongly recommended that the ability to make new friends is more important than the ability to keep friendships with small number of people over a long period of time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Nowadays friends play an important role ...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
... lot of new friends is better than keep a small number of them, there are others holding the view...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
... the ability to retain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time becau...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...th a small number of people over a long period of time because not only people can make their ...
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...but also they can specialize better. The first reason which should be stated ...
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...nds instead of small number of them. The second reason which deserves some po...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun friend seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of friends'.
Suggestion: a lot of friends
... and finally it was obvious people with a lot of friend were more successful than people with a...
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Line 5, column 654, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
...were more successful than people with a few number of them. Since the advantages...
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... than people with a few number of them. Since the advantages and privileges...
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Suggestion: period
...with small number of people over a long period of time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, second, so, still, for example, in addition, first of all, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1762.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68617021277 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29804471379 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.420212765957 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.8033489479 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.181818182 100.406767564 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.1818181818 20.6045352989 166% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7272727273 5.45110844103 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378034358506 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.175806171187 0.076458572812 230% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143021374703 0.0737576698707 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.310004497873 0.150856017488 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.143735741551 0.0645574589148 223% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.89 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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