As the world becomes technologically advanced, computer are replacing more and more job. Describe some job positions that may be lost because of computers and discuss at least one problem that may result.

As the world becomes more technologically advanced, computers are replacing more and more jobs which people work at. As a result, some problems may be resulted from this situation.

Cashiers are less likely to be visible. As computers become more advanced, customers can use the computer in the supermarkets to pay instead of to be done by the cashier. Under an advanced technology, all forms of payment are able to pay on their own, inclusive of a self-paid banking services. Cashiers will be lost eventually.

Teachers, generally, are replaced by computers. As a matter of fact, as e-learning outcompetes teachers teaching at school, which resulted by the present phenomenon of technological advancement. Not only does the computer provides online learning to students, who are visual learners, prior to their learning, but also possesses an interactive learning mode. This will, in the end, replace the job position of teachers who will no longer exist. Teachers will be of less qualified as a job post.

Therefore problems may result from the situation of computer replacement. The absence of job positions not only leads to unemployment, but also a progression towards hinder in communication. Instead of face-to-face interactions, people are inclined to have lower chances to speak verbally with one another. In this way, it is foreseen that communication will no longer necessary in everyday life. Worse still, zero communication is more than possible to happen. Maintaining relation, intimacy, and a sense of association will, in the end, vanish and fade out.

In conclusion, it does seem likely that the advanced technology is dominating whether we like it or not. Now the issue has become- problems has arisen. I believe that sooner or later, the biggest problem is that human communication will no longer possible. Since technology is progressing, undeniably, we have to accept that more job positions will soon be lost.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, still, therefore, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1638.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30097087379 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08995570666 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57928802589 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.7366279322 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.0 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7142857143 20.7667163134 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2380952381 7.06120827912 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.414293803015 0.244688304435 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108522188279 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1165180535 0.0667982634062 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251701480771 0.151304729494 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.17458683298 0.056905535591 307% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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