Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
World is the pool of information about anything that you can imagine or not. Our behaviors are based on the information that we have about different subjects. Therefore, knowing about events which are happening around the world is very important. In my opinion, I do agree that getting some information about events happening around the world is very important because of two main reasons.
First, there is cohensive relation between all events around the world. Nobody can say that a event is not my bussiness. We can not igore the events because they do affect other events which they have some impacts to us. For example, I remember, last month, I and my father was wathicng TV economic news. We heared that there is an economical disaster in China. My father states that change the TV channel; saying that it is realy time-consuming to watch news about a disaster in a country which is far from our country, Iran. After two weeks, we hear that our country got in a really trouble because of decreaing in oil exporting to China. Our government had to increase ordinary people taxes. After this events, my father told me that he really made a mistake about The news about China and we understood that every news ,which we can not even imagine, can affects us. As you can see, there is a vital connection between all events; So it is important to have some informatain about any events all around the world.
Second, human-being are sociable specis and because of that they need some information to help the people who are aound them. If we have some information about an event which our friend or our family member cares, it is important to get that information to inform him or her. For instance, I remember, last year, when I got an email from decreasing the value of gold, I forward the email to my friend Sam who had a lot of golds in his home. He sold all of his gold based on the information which I gave to him and he prevent himself from an economical disaster. After that, he really apreciated me because of this information. As you can see, sometimes an event which is not important to you, can be considerable for your friend or others.
To sum up, It is important two got any information even we do not care them at the moment. I hope that one day, there will be not any bad events.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 92, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...s around the world. Nobody can say that a event is not my bussiness. We can not i...
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Line 2, column 576, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('really') instead an adjective, or a noun ('trouble') instead of another adjective.
... weeks, we hear that our country got in a really trouble because of decreaing in oil exporting t...
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Line 2, column 701, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...o increase ordinary people taxes. After this events, my father told me that he reall...
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Line 2, column 822, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... China and we understood that every news ,which we can not even imagine, can affec...
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Line 2, column 859, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'affect'
Suggestion: affect
...ews ,which we can not even imagine, can affects us. As you can see, there is a vital co...
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Line 3, column 107, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...eed some information to help the people who are aound them. If we have some information...
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Line 3, column 517, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'prevents'.
Suggestion: prevents
... information which I gave to him and he prevent himself from an economical disaster. Af...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, really, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1884.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52884615385 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52768966683 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456730769231 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1955259717 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.6363636364 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9090909091 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22727272727 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197995190617 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659897847339 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.069414423397 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132658038454 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651171899055 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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