TPO-49 - Integrated Writing Task

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TPO-49 - Integrated Writing Task

Submitted by pooja257 on Sat, 06/16/2018 - 21:54

The lecture and the passage is about the navigation of humpbacks, the reading states that humpbacks use stars to navigate from one Location to another.

First of all, the lecturer states that there is no connection between animal intelligence and navigation by stars. There are several other animals who also use stars to navigate like birds, ducks etc. Moreover, the ducks are the kind of animals who are not considered as intelligent, still they navigate by stars. This clearly shows that they use their intuition to navigate in night sky and not the cognitive ability or intelligence. Hence, this claim directly refuted the passage claim which states that humpback use their intelligence to navigate.

Secondly, the lecturer mentions that if humpbacks move in straight line, it does not illustrates that their source of navigation are stars. Humpbacks have bio-magnetide in their brain which works with earth’s magnetic field and cause them to move in straight line. This again contradicts the passage point that animals can only maintain movement in straight direction if they rely on stars for their orientation.

Thirdly, the lecture contends that spy hopping is also done by sharks, but they do not use it to migrate. Sharks use it as a tool to hunt animals and use them as their food. This is not in agreement with the passage that spy hopping provide them with information to navigate.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 506, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uted the passage claim which states that humpback use their intelligence to navig...
^^
Line 5, column 86, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'illustrate'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: illustrate
...acks move in straight line, it does not illustrates that their source of navigation are sta...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 86, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'illustrate'
Suggestion: illustrate
...acks move in straight line, it does not illustrates that their source of navigation are sta...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 5.01324503311 279% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1180.0 1373.03311258 86% => OK
No of words: 231.0 270.72406181 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10822510823 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66975702194 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 145.348785872 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515151515152 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 362.7 419.366225166 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.4964536331 49.2860985944 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.3333333333 110.228320801 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 7.06452816374 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323122750836 0.272083759551 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124450047723 0.0996497079465 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427205290149 0.0662205650399 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192342259651 0.162205337803 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489213273857 0.0443174109184 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 63.6247240618 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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