It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents,for instance for sport and music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Some people argue that being good in physical activities and arts are often genetically inherited as compared to other professions while other believe that anyone can attain such skills through learning. Genetics sometimes do play a role in a person's ability to be good in their line of profession, I believe that anyone can acquire skills in any profession through hard work and training.
On the one hand, being good at certain activities is some times considered to be natural. This is said because most of the athletes and other skills related work is inherited by the young ones from their forefathers and is passed on through the family tree for years. One reason is that the off springs see the elder members of their family involved in a certain line of profession for years and they easily get motivated to pursue such careers in their adulthood. The other reason is that, fathers transfer their genes to their children which determine the young ones to the profession same as their parents. This gives the children an efficiency to learn and progress more rapidly.
On the other hand, hard work, diligence and enthusiasm can make a person achieve his goals in any walk of life. Social media athletes achieving higher goals in their profession and different art galleries promote the interest of people in adapting such line of professions. For instance, the famous boxer Amir khan has no family history in boxing but it was rather his hard work and dedication making him achieve success. Further more, youngsters in poor families want to lead a more comfortable and elegant life style which also compels them towards hard work making them reach their goals
In conclusion, natural factors do make people more efficient and successful in their line of work but in my opinion working relentlessly can make anyone help achieve success.
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being good in physical activities and arts are...
being good in physical activities and arts is...
because most of the athletes and other skills related work is inherited by
because most of the athletes and other skills related work are inherited by
The other reason is that,
The another reason is that,
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flaws:
1. No. of Different Words: 168 200. there are some duplicated key words. for example:
being good in physical activities and arts are...
being good at certain activities is some times ..
diligence and enthusiasm can make a person...
natural factors do make people more efficient...
working relentlessly can make anyone help achieve success...
2. some sentences are relatively long. make them shorter.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 310 350
No. of Characters: 1512 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.196 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.877 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.453 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.631 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.417 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.368 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.593 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 244, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
... Genetics sometimes do play a role in a persons ability to be good in their line of pro...
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Line 7, column 154, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'anyone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'helps'.
Suggestion: helps
...on working relentlessly can make anyone help achieve success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1542.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97419354839 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50722161959 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548387096774 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.8184185602 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.181818182 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1818181818 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.45454545455 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143875165412 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0667469525039 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528014329673 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0921184172651 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572866594566 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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