In the given magazine article, the author has recommended in the preceding argument is that the best place for retirement people is the Clearview due to the bueaty of the nature and climate, and it seems to be quite plausible at first glance by citing a detaild article. Hence, the recommender mentions the first assumption is that Clearview has amazing natural beauty and steady temperature. As further support for the argument, also points out the housing cost and the taxes lower than the neighboring towns. Finally, points that in the future there might be a program to improve schools, streets, public services and there will be better health system because the physicians number greater than the national average. However, careful scrutiny sheds light on the plethora of assumptions that could undermine the valuation of the argument.
The first piece of evidence, citing an article is not clear, specialty we do not know the magazine domain. And the evidence is that, we do not know how was carried out and what is the methods adopted to get these recommendations. Thus, we have to ask about the scope and validity of that article. For example, the sample may not have been representative of large scope. Moreover, the article may have been 10 pages long, with 2 questions dedicated to the argument topic. We just do not know. Unless the article is fully representative, valid, and reliable, it can not be used to effectively back the recommender's argument.
Another piece of evidence, that might undermine the argument and seems catastrophic, even though, the first glance appears plausible and indicates a positive or concrete correlation between choosing Clearview as the best place to live and it is nature and steady climate. Moreover, they can benefit from the housing low cost plus lower taxas compering with the nearby towns, this does not necessarily indicate the casual relation between the two events. Thus, there are multifarious factors including, firstly, the beauty of the nature and climate is a good point but not the most crucial one. For example, the availabilty of the services, outstanding infrastucture and advance communication system have great considerations. Secondly, the unequal compering between the taxas and the housing cost with the nearby towns makes the situation infeasible because we do not have information about the other towns life, and what kind of services have provided and their residants standard of life that will have impacts on the argument. In order to strength and figure out the true case, a thorough investigation considering the leverage of all possible contributors is expected. Because the recommender does not effectively show a connection between the Clearview as a great possible place for living and the ostensible causes to take the decsion of living there.
Last but not least, the recommender implies the Clearview residants will have a good health system due to availabilty of greater number of physicions compering with national average. Arguably, this assumption should be aborted, because a good health system depends on for instance skillful health team that consiste of physicions, nurses, physiotherapist. Moreover, labs, dignostic tests and operational and surgical tools.
Lastly, because the argument makes several unwarranted evidences, it fails to make a convincing case that Clearview will the best choice for the retirement people, and needs to have additional evidences in order to get move complete understanding of the strength and weakness of the argument.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In the given magazine article, the author has recommended in the preceding argument is that the best place for retirement people is the Clearview due to the bueaty of the nature and climate, and it seems to be quite plausible at first glance by citing a detaild article.
Error: detaild Suggestion: detail
Error: bueaty Suggestion: breath
Sentence: Moreover, they can benefit from the housing low cost plus lower taxas compering with the nearby towns, this does not necessarily indicate the casual relation between the two events.
Error: taxas Suggestion: taxes
Sentence: For example, the availabilty of the services, outstanding infrastucture and advance communication system have great considerations.
Error: infrastucture Suggestion: infrastructure
Error: availabilty Suggestion: availability
Sentence: Secondly, the unequal compering between the taxas and the housing cost with the nearby towns makes the situation infeasible because we do not have information about the other towns life, and what kind of services have provided and their residants standard of life that will have impacts on the argument.
Error: residants Suggestion: residents
Error: taxas Suggestion: taxes
Sentence: Because the recommender does not effectively show a connection between the Clearview as a great possible place for living and the ostensible causes to take the decsion of living there.
Error: decsion Suggestion: decision
Sentence: Last but not least, the recommender implies the Clearview residants will have a good health system due to availabilty of greater number of physicions compering with national average.
Error: residants Suggestion: residents
Error: compering Suggestion: competing
Error: physicions Suggestion: physicians
Error: availabilty Suggestion: availability
Sentence: Arguably, this assumption should be aborted, because a good health system depends on for instance skillful health team that consiste of physicions, nurses, physiotherapist.
Error: physicions Suggestion: physicians
Error: consiste Suggestion: consisted
Sentence: Moreover, labs, dignostic tests and operational and surgical tools.
Error: dignostic Suggestion: diagnostic
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flaws:
the arguments are not right on the point.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 15 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 565 350
No. of Characters: 2911 1500
No. of Different Words: 262 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.875 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.152 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.794 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 220 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 174 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 118 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 69 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.565 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.017 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.783 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.284 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.493 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Most likely the arguments are
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 520, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...wer than the neighboring towns. Finally, points that in the future there might be...
^^
Line 3, column 180, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...not know how was carried out and what is the methods adopted to get these recomme...
^^
Line 3, column 602, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'recommenders'' or 'recommender's'?
Suggestion: recommenders'; recommender's
...can not be used to effectively back the recommenders argument. Another piece of evide...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly back the recommenders argument. Another piece of evidence, that might un...
^^
Line 6, column 904, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'towns'' or 'town's'?
Suggestion: towns'; town's
...do not have information about the other towns life, and what kind of services have pr...
^^^^^
Line 6, column 1361, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es to take the decsion of living there. Last but not least, the recommender impl...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, for instance, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 11.1786427146 242% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2998.0 2260.96107784 133% => OK
No of words: 565.0 441.139720559 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30619469027 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87542086881 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88533251245 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 204.123752495 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486725663717 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 927.9 705.55239521 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.8355860125 57.8364921388 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.347826087 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5652173913 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13043478261 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224586859754 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571641933165 0.0743258471296 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448024424789 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118491495777 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043758309202 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 98.500998004 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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