Nowadays children spend their time on working on the internet, always it is not that bad than parents think.in my opinion, parents should think positively.
First, when the teachers asked them to search about some topics as a project to performance it, in front of other students, the best way they have is, searching on the internet because that is the full of information, they need. I remember in 2001 I should do my proposal in front of many stranger people that I’ve never seen them, so I was searching on the internet for one day to type my texture that I had to prepare, at the end that was an amazing experience I’ve ever had but before the result, all the time my mother was nagging to how much I used my laptop, in my opinion parents should believe their children.
Second, all the children need break time to rest and what’s more interesting than playing on computer games but their parents should have controlled the time that they are playing. On the other hand, parents should manage their children time to doing exciting jobs as painting classes or play guitar or submit them to dance classes, whatever they enjoying to do, it’s depends on them also it’s a better idea that social usage. for example, when I was 8 my parents decided to send me a dance house to learned hip hop because I loved that, and nowadays after 23 years when I’ve free time I play my favorite music and dancing, I really enjoy it more than any social networks.
Third, parents should know about their children friends until they are teenagers to protecting them as well as they can. for example, if our children are chatting a lot even midnight, it has some bad effect to their education and parents should aware it to what they are doing? For example, my younger sister had friend, she smoked and drink when they were just 14, and when my parents follow them they went to the night club and they had an awful argue with the police and they arrested them and my sister spend one night at jail, that time our parent’s punishment her, after she got free. but that was a great lesson for her,and nowadays she thankful of our parents to save her and she is a professional biologist,and enjoy her life and her time, more than to going to some clubs and wasting her life.
In conclusion, parents should take care of their children also manage their time with organization an amazing hobby they love to do. In addition, they should protect them as well as they can but not very much. They should be a best friend of their children and supportively, but they shouldn’t force their children. They should understand the situations and never say lie to their children like as a good friend. After these things automatically they study better than before.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 353, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'enjoying doing'.
Suggestion: enjoying doing
...it them to dance classes, whatever they enjoying to do, it's depends on them also it&apos...
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Line 5, column 443, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...apos;s a better idea that social usage. for example, when I was 8 my parents decide...
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Line 5, column 524, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to hip'
Suggestion: to hip
...ded to send me a dance house to learned hip hop because I loved that, and nowadays ...
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Line 7, column 122, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...to protecting them as well as they can. for example, if our children are chatting a...
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Line 7, column 597, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...s;s punishment her, after she got free. but that was a great lesson for her,and now...
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Line 7, column 632, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , and
...ree. but that was a great lesson for her,and nowadays she thankful of our parents to...
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Line 7, column 721, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , and
... her and she is a professional biologist,and enjoy her life and her time, more than ...
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Line 9, column 226, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...y can but not very much. They should be a best friend of their children and suppo...
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Line 9, column 419, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...o their children like as a good friend. After these things automatically they study b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, third, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 91.0 43.0788530466 211% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2295.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 491.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67413441955 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44926958996 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488798370672 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 680.4 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.7559854163 48.9658058833 185% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.0 100.406767564 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.7333333333 20.6045352989 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 5.45110844103 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1683549232 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0757488797485 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0183577438329 0.0737576698707 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108296944479 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238640799403 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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