Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Is obvious that many people travel for other country because want be relax, or want to learn other cuture. However, this is not always the best option for the people, the travel is better in relation with objective of the people. Therefore, I don’t agree completely with this statement, and I have two reason to support my opinion.
First, some people need travel to relax, to have a good time, and not always need be a international traveld. People in these days have need to travel aboroad, but in much time is disnecessary. For example, I have a friend that ever vocation of his work he need to traveld abroad, and he said that this is necessary since that his work is very stressifull. She usually say that she doesn’t like could, and she always travel to cold places. This not make sense and some people say that she like spend money. He argue thai is necessary because this travel make better.
Second, many people travel to know new coulture and things. However, to do this, is not necessary travel to other country, since some country is large enough and have a big diversity of culture and beautiful places. For example, I have a friend that studying dance, and she thought that is necessary travel to meet other kind of dance. In 2012, she make a big traveld to Brazil and she could see that only in this country she culd sees a diversity of dance like maracatu, caboclinho, samba, pagode and others. Thus, this example get evidence that no always who travel in this country without aborad is more benefit.
Third, some time is better travel to abroad to learn a other lenguage. Since one person travel to other country to study a new lenguage and this is official of the country the students certily will have more benefit. To inlustrate, I have read a report of a pscologist that said who travel to learn other indiom and living in a country that say the same have a increase in the learning. Thefore, in this situation is better traveled abrod, since student will have a best development.
In conclusion, I think that the people can be benefit traveling in the same country and abroad. Beside that, the people need know the objective of their trevel. Therfore, I think that people can have difference benefit in the traveld.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ave a good time, and not always need be a international traveld. People in these ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l. She usually say that she doesn't like could, and she always travel to col...
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Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...eople say that she like spend money. He argue thai is necessary because this travel m...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...large enough and have a big diversity of culture and beautiful places. For exampl...
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'makes'.
Suggestion: makes
... meet other kind of dance. In 2012, she make a big traveld to Brazil and she could s...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ime is better travel to abroad to learn a other lenguage. Since one person travel...
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Suggestion:
...el to learn other indiom and living in a country that say the same have a increas...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ng in a country that say the same have a increase in the learning. Thefore, in t...
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Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...traveled abrod, since student will have a best development. In conclusion, I t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, third, thus, for example, i think, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68844221106 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42158400415 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.427135678392 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 591.3 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1333509049 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.8571428571 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9523809524 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207761636419 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079475710075 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043151959774 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138826991962 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294065938644 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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