Dear Sir or Madam
According to the advertisement about people volunteering to help our local hospital in different ways. I would like to volunteer and share some laugh with unfortunate kids who are suffering from cancer. I am working full time job in marketing and I do not have enough time to do something I love. When I saw your advertisement it made me realize how bad I am in being social and not involved in improving and helping our society. I have always been interesting in charity in different types. Also, I have always wanted to help and make a difference in my county. This opportunity will allow me to spread joy and love with others, and then will help me to go through my bad days.
The show will involve two other friends of mine. Moreover, we will make a short entertainment shows that include: funny plays from our creations and children stories. Moreover we will be asking easy questions and giving prizes. Also we will be dressed in carton`s character to add some extra fun. Furthermore, there will be a special girl who will paint on the children`s faces their favorite animation.
Please do not hastate to contact me on my email address below. I will be free on weekend days from 8 am to 6 pm.
Thank you,
Lana
Email: l77@hotmail.com
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Dear Sir or Madam According to the advertisement about peo...
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Suggestion: fulltime
...re suffering from cancer. I am working full time job in marketing and I do not have enou...
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Message: Did you mean 'interested'?
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...helping our society. I have always been interesting in charity in different types. Also, I ...
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...rom our creations and children stories. Moreover we will be asking easy questions and gi...
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...rom our creations and children stories. Moreover we will be asking easy questions and gi...
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Suggestion: Also,
...sking easy questions and giving prizes. Also we will be dressed in carton's cha...
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...s from 8 am to 6 pm. Thank you, Lana Email: l77@hotmail.com
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...nk you, Lana Email: l77@hotmail.com
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, moreover, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 1.00243902439 998% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 5.60731707317 517% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1062.0 965.302439024 110% => OK
No of words: 225.0 196.424390244 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84672131095 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 106.607317073 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.648888888889 0.547539520022 119% => OK
syllable_count: 325.8 283.868780488 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 1.53170731707 457% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.5481527905 43.030603864 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.8 112.824112599 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0 22.9334400587 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.73333333333 5.23603664747 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 3.70975609756 350% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155723487511 0.215688989381 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476061444686 0.103423049105 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547379141604 0.0843802449381 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0686573842685 0.15604864568 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0840801678273 0.0819641961636 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 13.2329268293 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 61.2550243902 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.5 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 40.7170731707 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.