An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The recommendation proposes to combat Vitamin A deficiency by providing alternative sources of foods rich in Vitamin A. This proposal doesn’t consider the reasons why a deficiency of Vitamin A exists in the nation of Tagus. The reasons why other traditional sources of Vitamin A have been ineffective must be examined to ascertain whether it is solely due to the lack of such foods or rather due to other environmental or biological reasons. It also must address whether the Vitamin A content in the new breed of millet seeds will be absorbed by the body effectively. The interaction of the new breed with other ingredients in the food must also be studied. Certification from the medical community and other food regulatory bodies must be obtained to safeguard the health of the people of Tagus. Further, it should be seen if the problem lies in the distribution of nutritious food.T hen, even the existence of a better variety of millets would not solve the underlying problem.
The proposal assumes the new breed of millet seeds will grow abundantly in the lands of Tagus. It has no mention of whether field testing of the seeds has been done in Tagus and whether the soil and weather conditions are conducive for the growth of this new breed of millet. The long-term effect of cultivating this engineered breed of millet on the soil and its surroundings must be determined. Like, whether it consumes a lot of water or saps necessary nutrients needed for other plants to grow. A comparison based on the cost of resources consumed by the old and new breed of millets must be done to ascertain whether there are any detrimental effects of the latter. The new breed of millets must be certified by the concerned environmental authorities before it can be distributed. The cost of farming the seeds, although subsidized, might still be higher than the current operating costs of the farmers. Further surveys on whether the farmers will readily accept this change must also be ascertained.
The proposal assumes the people of Tagus will readily accept the new breed of millets. It fails to consider any sociological or religious concerns about genetic engineering of foods the society may have. The taste of the new breed of millets may not be liked by the people. Millets could be a staple food because it is available abundantly and cheap. The new breed may be costlier than the regular breed of millets leading to people substituting it with some other grain. The Government of Tagus must also see if there are more pressing concerns it must tackle and whether the budget allocated for the aforementioned programme will hamper other important initiatives. It should also examine other cost effective measures that may be able to better tackle the issue at hand
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not exactly. need to argue this:
While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet.
argument 2 -- not exactly. need to argue this:
Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety.
argument 3 -- not exactly. need to argue this:
To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 470 350
No. of Characters: 2265 1500
No. of Different Words: 207 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.656 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.819 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.743 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 160 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.381 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.55 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.476 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.459 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: T
... in the distribution of nutritious food.T hen, even the existence of a better var...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...would not solve the underlying problem. The proposal assumes the new breed of mi...
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Line 3, column 911, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...current operating costs of the farmers. Further surveys on whether the farmers will rea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, still
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.9520958084 193% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 13.6137724551 7% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2307.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 468.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92948717949 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80302383475 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452991452991 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 723.6 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1145013374 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.863636364 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2727272727 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.31818181818 5.70786347227 23% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375010975971 0.218282227539 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131566505871 0.0743258471296 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743520788362 0.0701772020484 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273310757594 0.128457276422 213% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301334962365 0.0628817314937 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 98.500998004 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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