Many of the problems young people now experience, like juvenile deliquency, arise from the fact rhat, many married women work and are not at home ro look after their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Many of the problems young people now experience, like juvenile deliquency, arise from the fact rhat, many married women work and are not at home ro look after their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Submitted by Justin on Sun, 09/01/2013 - 11:02

Today's world is engaged with lot of severe concerns where juvenile deliquency is spreding its roots radically. It is claimed that absence of women on account of their jobs who are bread winners is principle reason behind juvenile deliquency. Although its a salient reason here, I would like to throw light on some other factors surging this phenomenon.

There are multifarious factors behind this burning concern. First and foremost, in the rat race of achieving more and more, both genders are subjected to work to earn money to meet out their towering outlay. Therefore, in the absence of paren...

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Sentence: Although its a salient reason here, I would like to throw light on some other factors surging this phenomenon.
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Sentence: Therefore, in the absence of parents, childern espeacially young girls have be victim of sexual harrasment.
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Sentence: Today's world is engaged with lot of severe concerns where juvenile deliquency is spreding its roots radically.
Error: deliquency Suggestion: delinquency
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Sentence: It is claimed that absence of women on account of their jobs who are bread winners is principle reason behind juvenile deliquency.
Error: deliquency Suggestion: delinquency

Sentence: Therefore, in the absence of parents, childern espeacially young girls have be victim of sexual harrasment.
Error: harrasment Suggestion: harassment
Error: childern Suggestion: children
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Sentence: As a result, in order to manage hafety sum of money to manage very expensive drugs, they commit murder, robbery, bulgary and so on.
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Sentence: Adding to it, illiteracy especially in countryside, lack of moral virtues because of less quality time between parents and offsprings, unnecessary freedom to teenagers, no observation of their friend's company should not be underestimated underlying causes to spell ever widening juvenile deliquency.
Error: deliquency Suggestion: delinquency

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