Many of the problems young people now experience, like juvenile deliquency, arise from the fact rhat, many married women work and are not at home ro look after their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Sentence: Although its a salient reason here, I would like to throw light on some other factors surging this phenomenon.
Description: The tag a determiner, possessive is not usually followed by a
Suggestion: Refer to its and a

Sentence: Therefore, in the absence of parents, childern espeacially young girls have be victim of sexual harrasment.
Description: A verb 'to have', uninflected present tense, infinitive or is not usually followed by a verb 'to be', infinitive or imperative
Suggestion: Refer to have and be

Sentence: Today's world is engaged with lot of severe concerns where juvenile deliquency is spreding its roots radically.
Error: deliquency Suggestion: delinquency
Error: spreding Suggestion: speeding

Sentence: It is claimed that absence of women on account of their jobs who are bread winners is principle reason behind juvenile deliquency.
Error: deliquency Suggestion: delinquency

Sentence: Therefore, in the absence of parents, childern espeacially young girls have be victim of sexual harrasment.
Error: harrasment Suggestion: harassment
Error: childern Suggestion: children
Error: espeacially Suggestion: especially

Sentence: As a result, in order to manage hafety sum of money to manage very expensive drugs, they commit murder, robbery, bulgary and so on.
Error: bulgary Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: hafety Suggestion: safety

Sentence: Adding to it, illiteracy especially in countryside, lack of moral virtues because of less quality time between parents and offsprings, unnecessary freedom to teenagers, no observation of their friend's company should not be underestimated underlying causes to spell ever widening juvenile deliquency.
Error: deliquency Suggestion: delinquency

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No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.053 0.07

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 283 350
No. of Characters: 1496 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.102 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.286 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.736 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.769 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.98 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.607 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.053 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

Are my ides relevant according to demand of essay ?????

without errors xould I get 8.0 or 8.5 bands ??????

tnx very much sir for your compliments ....credit goes to only GoD grace ..!