A glance at different type of job brings a light question that has several times provoked discussions that is whether a person be self employed , work for some one or own a business. some people can contend that to have one's own business or being self employed is the best. However, I would like to support working for somebody because of fine routine and maximum learning. In ensuing paragraph, I will try to shed some light on this point of view through ample examples and conspicuous reasons.
The exquisite point to be mentioned firstly is that a proper routine is set when one works for somebody in order to follow the schedule. What happens is that when we do a job life is disciplined out and organized. Not to mention the fact we always stay active. My own experience in a small firm, few years ago, is a compelling example. Not only my whole day was planned before hand but also the next few months. So it was easier for me to plan stuff with my friends and family. On the other hand self employed people tend to become indolent and lazy. They are their own boss. Procrastination is what these people are more likely to do.
Another point to be mentioned here is that there are more chances of professional development if we work under the supervision of the somebody. Not only do we get guidance at every step but also we have somebody to look up to and get an inspiration from. There overlying could guide them and share there decades of experience with them. Furthermore in a job, there is a healthy competition between the employee. This allow them to be the best of their best by working with hard work and motivation. These forces are a key to success.
Cutting the long story short, it is up to the individual what he prefers but I strongly believe at least for the first few years of the career we ought to work under somebody. There marvelous guidance and professionalism will expand our knowledge and will have a profound impact on our thinking. Later we can use this to develop our own company. is it not better to have road to follow than to blindly make a road.
- TOPIC# 27 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing? 60
- Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, where does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
- Some people say that self employment is better than a job in company or an institution. Discuss , what is your opinion ? Give reasons to support your answer . 70
- TOEFL essay: Why go to university? 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...hat is whether a person be self employed , work for some one or own a business. so...
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Line 1, column 156, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'someone'?
Suggestion: someone
...er a person be self employed , work for some one or own a business. some people can cont...
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Line 1, column 184, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
... , work for some one or own a business. some people can contend that to have ones ow...
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Line 2, column 373, Rule ID: BEFORE_HAND[1]
Message: Did you mean 'beforehand'?
Suggestion: beforehand
...mple. Not only my whole day was planned before hand but also the next few months. So it was...
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Line 2, column 554, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eople tend to become indolent and lazy. They are their own boss. Procrastination...
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Line 3, column 339, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
... there decades of experience with them. Furthermore in a job, there is a healthy competitio...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...st for the first few years of the career we ought to work under somebody. There m...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Is
...an use this to develop our own company. is it not better to have road to follow th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, so, at least, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1706.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48947368421 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55372619665 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542105263158 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.4301540128 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.1739130435 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5217391304 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.91304347826 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120892879065 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0340321598388 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460444272902 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0730681223709 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487184111297 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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