Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that to obtain success, the ability to take risks is necessary. Contrary to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that when we choose to take the risk we threatened our social position and if this risk has not the good result, this condition provide depression for us. Thus it is better to do works that we are sure that we have enough ability on its. I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that takes risk is an essential ability to receive success in the life.
First and foremost, if we have a whole view to the history of human life in the world, we can see that all of the famous and wonderful people who did very significant works and services for another people. We see that all of them take risks and remained persisly on their point of view. For example, the Gulliver who was known as an intelligent astronomer in the world. He took a really big risk to could be substantiated his ideas. He said that the Earth is global but most of the people and especially philosophers disagree with his idea and they want to kill him. But Gulliver stays on his idea and remained of people mind forever.
On another significant fact, that should be taken into the consideration is that each kind of new things that we want to do for the first time is aline with some level of risks. This is true that behind each decision should be present a lot of studies and precise research. But, anyway, examine each kind of this new things are risky. For example, when the scientist wants to test a new drug for cancer, even this drug spend a lot of examination process but test of this drug of humans are common with some unknown aspect and also risks. But, if they do not accept this risk may be we could not treat a lot of kinds of diseases.
Finally, yet importantly, in a daily life, we see that some people who have this gallant to take risks can make more money. Like people who work in the bourse, they every day make the huge number of risks in their job and their salary is very more than other people with the same educational degree.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that take risks are critical for receiving to success. Because of a lot of historical evidence and a quick glance at the process of development around ours.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 312, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...is condiction provide depresion for us. Thus it is better to doing works that we are...
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Line 2, column 302, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a known'.
Suggestion: who is a known
...oint of view. For example, the Gallivor who known as a inteligent stranomer in the world....
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Line 2, column 315, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... For example, the Gallivor who known as a inteligent stranomer in the world. He t...
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Line 2, column 387, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'substantiate'
Suggestion: substantiate
...rld. He took a really big risk to could substantiated his ideas. He said that the Earth is gl...
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Line 2, column 449, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...s. He said that the Earth is global but most of people and specially phlasephes diagree with h...
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Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'alined'.
Suggestion: alined
...hat we want to do for the first time is aline with some level of risks. This is true ...
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Line 3, column 572, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...s. But, if they do not accept this risk may be we could not treatment a lot of kinds o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, really, so, still, thus, for example, kind of, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1836.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40287769784 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26543958845 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498800959233 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7145831004 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6315789474 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9473684211 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26315789474 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176889570905 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0600911350041 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421882987801 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0996019071155 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273879144039 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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