Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that in the modern lifestayl the young poeple are more indipendent person than young people in the past. They have more freedom to make decision about themselves in comparing to the past. contrary to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that today's paresnts strongly support their children this work let to their children do not learn how should be solve their problems, thus young people have not enough experince to make decision indipendently. I, to a great extent agree with this idea that today young poeple have more freedom to choice their own way of living.
First and foremost, in the past families controled by parents (mostly fathers) under strong diciplin and any nuatherise aid have very hard respons from them. therefore, childern mainly fair from their parents and try to attract their satisfy, so they do all of their work and decisions under their opinions. Thus, even when they became young person they have not ability of making any cotrast decision with them. this condition was more serious for gairls. For example, my grandmother says that when she was very young most of the families decided about marage of their children without asking from them. Some times the woman and man that want to marid togrter did not saw together until the marage day.
on another significant fact that should betaken into the cosideration is that today the knowledge of parents about method of gthrowing children changed compeletly toward past time. They get advice from psychologist about the method of relationship with their childern. Also, the public knowledge of people about relationship with children and young peole increases significantly. Parent from the early age learn to their children to make decision by themselves. For example, let to them to choice their toys and their clothds. And when they become a teenager they just hand them for a correct decision not make decision insted of them.
On the basis of reason that mentioned above I am convinced that today children have better personality and also freedom from making decision. because of, increase in knowledge of poeple and and alternation in parents points of view.
- It is more important to keep your old friends than to make new friends. 86
- one of the best ways that parents can help their children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. 76
- For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. 73
- Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 75
- Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities 76
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05801104972 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4384004658 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524861878453 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.468056148 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.722222222 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1111111111 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.42694776233 0.236089414692 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135690313929 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720813497338 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26211706349 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104907598198 0.0645574589148 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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