TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

I disagree with this statement. I believe that is not important to know what is happening around the world, because it is more important to focus only on what is happening in our own country.

To begin with, it is well known that the news on television is most of the time bad news, they usually reporting about wars, conflicts and dead people. These are the kind of news that really negatively affects my attitude and my mood. For example, one day I was watching the BBC news on TV and they were reporting about a journalist most probably murdered because she was working on a case of corrupted politicians. This news really made upset for the rest of my day, I could not stop to think in what horrible world we live, and the fact that we cannot do anything about it, it is how the world goes. This is one reason why I believe that knowing about what happening around the world it is not so important.

Second, nowadays people are always in a harsh and do not have much time to get informed about everything is happening in the world. If we have limited time it is better to inform about what is happening near us rather than about countries that lay on the other side of the world. For example, it is more useful knowing about the weather before we go to work, in this way we can properly choose our clothes and do not take the risk to get sick because we did not bring an umbrella with us, or also maybe if the road that lead us to the place where we work it is blocked for a car accident, or simply be informed about the traffic before to go to an important job interview.

Finally, sometimes we are not even able to judge if a news is true or is a fake news, because most of the time we do not know much about the real situation in other countries, whereas we can readily recognize a fake news when they are reporting facts from places near us and that we know very well. These are the reasons why I do not consider knowing about world event it is not so important to me; they most of the time are bad news, I do not have much time to follow them and because I cannot really recognize if they are fake news, because they reporting facts from places that I do not much about.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 133, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t everything is happening in the world. If we have limited time it is better to in...
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Line 7, column 53, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'news'.
Suggestion: news
...etimes we are not even able to judge if a news is true or is a fake news, because most...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, may, really, second, so, well, whereas, for example, kind of, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1769.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.2119047619 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23760252935 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428571428571 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.1838906791 48.9658058833 201% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 147.416666667 100.406767564 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.0 20.6045352989 170% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226149806592 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107181383362 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555977250235 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163345952991 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439672874641 0.0645574589148 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 58.1214874552 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.73 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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