do you agree the people should always participate in the activities that they are good at or talented in?
Various points of view which are relevant to this matter being discussed, bring us to the question of whether people should participate in activities that they are excellent or talented in. Some people have the opinion that the former is more effective, whereas other holds precisely the opposite view and argue that it is better to participate in activities that they are talented in. I content that people should do those activities that they are good in. The underlying aim of this essay is to forward some cogent reasons to shed light on some issues in this framework.
The first focal point that prompts me to hold this idea is that doing well activities lead to less mistake. When people have enough skill to do some things, they try to carry out their tasks in the best way possible. Therefore, sufficient skill occasions prosperity. As in the case, there is a body of an article that I read recently. The researchers of this article investigated two groups of students in the same activity. The first group was adept students and the second group was creative students. After evaluation of the research results, they found those students knew information about this activity and did it before as well were more successful rather than the talented student. The successful student in this research did action in the best way with less mistake. Therefore, skill leads to more success, and it is the target of any activities.
The second reason that comes to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint on this issue is that being well in activities make self-sufficient. When people know they are right in somethings their confidence increase and it causes to increase achievement. To take personal experience as an example; when I was a student, I attended a football game, but I heard the rival team is creative and all of the players are talented. Our group had practiced more and more; we had been proficient. We had enough confidence because of our skills. Therefore after 90 minutes, we won. Indeed, skillful cause self-confidence then it leads to success.
In ending up the discussion on this arguable point, thinking those mentioned above, one can easily guess that being adept and expert not only makes achievement but also it increases confidence and self-esteem. Nevertheless, that was a story in a nutshell. Obviously, there are many details, worth discussing, which are not mentioned here.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...his matter being discussed, bring us to the question of whether people should participate in activities...
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Message: Did you mean 'increasing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: increasing
...their confidence increase and it causes to increase achievement. To take personal experienc...
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... I heard the rival team is creative and all of the players are talented. Our group had pra...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...nough confidence because of our skills. Therefore after 90 minutes, we won. Indeed, skill...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...p the discussion on this arguable point, thinking those mentioned above, one can ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, nevertheless, second, so, then, therefore, well, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98511166253 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77842067541 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528535980149 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.6454760699 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.347826087 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5217391304 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.21739130435 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198451305371 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0550080275613 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100751830837 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116543390452 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124504824345 0.0645574589148 193% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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