I agree with the statement about future job, it is more important to get along with people than studying hard in school. The reason why I support this opinion is that social skill is needed in any business situation such as work place, society of industry and community. I will show three specific reasons as followed.
First of all, I study about web design and have career in related to the web developing field. From my personal experience, web designers are thought as "Designer" by customers in general however we have to communicate with customers to create plans until we complete tasks. At first, we are supposed to make a schedule for our project such as prototype or framework images. After that, we would make a group meeting to decide what kind of tasks everybody have to work for it. Moreover, the costs are talked about. Therefore, designers refer as people who create images or draw but we works for every single details to accomplish one project.
Second, studying hard in school is not the best way to have successful career life because if someone were approved by colleagues, they are reputed as a human not only by their skill, talent or the name of school they graduated. For example, in Japan, our job hunting system is a bit strange compared to another countries. Every April, the company welcome entry level students and the HR begin to train them so it does not matter if your major in university is related to the company subject or not. They hire us because they like our personality and identity especially communication skill hence you are not expected to do fancy activity for them.
Lastly, if you have to work in a group at office, you might better have a conversation with teammates. It is more important to get close to them and get to know each other to do some assignments than working as individual. In addition, as my personally perspective, we do need to have a small talk which is not related to our task. For incidence, in Sweden there is a coffee break known as Fika. At the company and school, they stop working for ten minutes to have a drink and talk without any reasons because they think it is more better to know someone working with them. Thus, I think having a break or small talk with colleagues is really important to work in a group.
All of considered, I agree with the statement that the ability to work well with people is better than working hard in school for future success.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 596, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'we' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'work'
Suggestion: work
...people who create images or draw but we works for every single details to accomplish ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 528, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...ut any reasons because they think it is more better to know someone working with them. Thus...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 556, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[7]
Message: The word 'someone' in subjunctive clause must be used with a base form of a verb: 'work'.
Suggestion: work
...think it is more better to know someone working with them. Thus, I think having a break...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, lastly, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, i think, in addition, in general, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2022.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65898617512 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61246023927 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52534562212 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7525400379 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.1 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273931816435 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840893821937 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954160283444 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189455998282 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105763124402 0.0645574589148 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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