TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

The reading passage discuss possible solutions to help the birds from being injuries as they cannot have the capability to distinguish between the transparent glass and the open air. However, the professor refutes each of the three possible solutions and explained why they are ineffective.

First, the reading passage claims that the one way glass will solve the problem as it transparent only from inside but outside the birds cannot see through the window. But the professor refutes that probable solution and he explains that the one way glass reflects a mirror in the outside and the mirror always reflects the light from the sky. So, when the birds see the reflection, they will think that is the sky's reflection and go toward it.

Second, the reading passage poses that colorful designs will be promising solution as the drawings and lines will going to fear the birds to fly through it. Also, at the same time the drawings will have many halls allowed the people to see the outside through it. However, the professor opposites this point by saying that the halls between the design will encourage the birds to come and fly through them. Another problem that the drawings will make inside building too dark to the people.

Third, the reading passage says that introducing magnetic field will be useful in rejects the birds away from the building as the author claimed that the birds have great ability to sense the magnetic fields and they used it when navigation. But the professor refutes this point by explaining that the birds use the magnetic fields only when they migrate in the winter from the cold place to the warmer place but, in case of short distances they depend on their eyes.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 62, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...assage poses that colorful designs will be promising solution as the drawings and lines will...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 115, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'go'
Suggestion: go
...solution as the drawings and lines will going to fear the birds to fly through it. Al...
^^^^^
Line 8, column 469, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rt distances they depend on their eyes. .
^^^
Line 8, column 471, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... distances they depend on their eyes. .
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, second, so, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1423.0 1373.03311258 104% => OK
No of words: 291.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89003436426 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26243929076 2.5805825403 88% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470790378007 0.540411800872 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 414.0 419.366225166 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.1869431038 49.2860985944 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.363636364 110.228320801 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4545454545 21.698381199 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06452816374 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.434714969435 0.272083759551 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170117823994 0.0996497079465 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0893066561046 0.0662205650399 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25843964047 0.162205337803 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0237520318268 0.0443174109184 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.3589403974 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.42419426049 87% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 63.6247240618 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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