In this argument, the city council is recommending to replace the incandescent bulbs in public buildings to light-emitting diodes, on purpose of reducing the electrical cost in the future. To demonstrate on this point, it is mentioned that LED lights burn brighter and don’t cost any money to purchase more. However, this argument doesn’t provide concrete evidences to prove that switching LED bulb will eventually reduce electrical cost. Here are several aspects the author fails to substantiate.
First of all, the conclusion that the effect of switching LED will bring down the electrical cost in the future is rough and not convincible. The author doesn’t clarify on the period of “future”. Is it 3 years ,5 years, or 10 years, we don’t know. Meanwhile, it is assumed that the amount of electricity consumed will decrease and the cost in an identical amount of electricity will thus be reduced. Seems the author forget to count in the replacing charge initially for all public buildings, which will include material fees, labor fees, installation fees etc. If these costs were added up to the total cost, the final charge might be higher in near future instead of being lower. The author need to provide how the cost is made up and in how many years will the cost be reduced, before he makes such a conclusion.
Furthermore, not enough comparation is given to prove that the cost will be reduced after the installation of LED. It might be true that LED burns brighter and cost no more to purchase. And merely by stating these facts is not strong enough to convince us the cost will go down. Yes, the LED burns brighter, but will it consume more electricity, in order to give more light? What is the relation of ‘burns brighter’ and ‘saving money’, we need more elaboration on this point. Moreover, the price per bulb is not mentioned in this argument. If an LED bulb cost higher than an incandescent bulb, then how can we believe replacing LED bulb in all public buildings will lower the electricity cost?
In addition, the amount of electricity consumed before and after the installation of LED light is not mentioned. To conclude a cost is reduced, we need to firstly understand if unit price is reduced, then if the quantity stays the same or lower. Only when we meet both conditions, can we give a rational conclusion that the final cost will decrease. Whereas, there is no evidence in this argument to state the amount of electricity will be reduced after LED installation.
To summarize, this argument is weak in its demonstration of saving money in electricity cost in the future. To further strengthen on this argument, the author must include more data comparation in unit cost and the quantity of consumed electricity. Expect that, the reader also need to be informed how the cost is reduced and when in the future can we expect a cost decrease.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: First of all, the conclusion that the effect of switching LED will bring down the electrical cost in the future is rough and not convincible.
Error: convincible Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Furthermore, not enough comparation is given to prove that the cost will be reduced after the installation of LED.
Error: comparation Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: To further strengthen on this argument, the author must include more data comparation in unit cost and the quantity of consumed electricity.
Error: comparation Suggestion: No alternate word
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 496 350
No. of Characters: 2301 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.719 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.639 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.641 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.862 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.328 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.503 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.132 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 215, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , a
...hor has put forth a statistical evidence,a research and an example of the field wh...
^^
Line 2, column 357, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'proved', 'proven'.
Suggestion: proved; proven
...argument until and unless the survey is prove to be controlled wherein all the other ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, so, then, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2101.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 420.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00238095238 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69249713395 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466666666667 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2338068903 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.722222222 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0162858424056 0.218282227539 7% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00634010738506 0.0743258471296 9% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0127628040265 0.0701772020484 18% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0108833574373 0.128457276422 8% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0113889830736 0.0628817314937 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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