Even Globalisation affect the world's economy in a positive way, it's negative side should not be forgoten. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
One of the most conspicuous trends in the 21st century is a closer connection between countries, in both economic and cultural aspects. There is a widespread worry that it will lead to some serious problems such as cultural assimilation or monotony. However, a number of people claim that it will positively affect the global economy. My essay will discuss about this urgent issue.
To begin with, globalisation has contributed to the world's economy in various ways. The advance in technology has allowed a vast majority of businesses to cross over the territorial boundary lines, which make them ...
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1. To begin with = first of
1. To begin with = first of all
2. strongly believe = firmly hold the opinion that
3. These days = In this day and age
Sentence: By way of conclusion, i strongly believe that globalisation is inevitable for the developement of the economy and should be encouraged meanwhile governments, businesses must have a more balanced approach by taking appropriate steps to deal with the matters related to political and cultural concerns of the world.
Error: developement Suggestion: development
Error: globalisation Suggestion: No alternate word
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