TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task A little over 2,200 years ago, the Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse. According to some ancient historians, the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a "burning mirror": a polished co

The reading and the speaker discuss whether or not the Greeks used burning mirror to defend themselves from Romans from discrepant perspectives. The author of the reading thinks that ancient Greeks did not have high technology advance to use the burning mirror and he gives three reasons to support his point. However, the speaker casts doubt on the claims made in the article. He says that none of those ideas are convincing.
First of all, the author of the reading points out that the ancient Greeks was not qualified enough to invent the mirror. It is noted that a mirror concentrate on sunlight and need to be wide. This point is challenged by the speaker. He restates the fact that people do not need to make a large mirror. They can make small pieces of copiers and attach them together.
Secondly, the author of the reading contends that it takes a long time to make a burning mirror and while producing the burning mirror the ships need to be stable. The speaker argues this reason by saying that people do not only make the burning mirror by wood. They can also manufacture the burning mirror by pitch. In fact, Greeks used the pitch to produce the burning mirror. Because the pitch is inflammable, it just takes some seconds to complete a burning mirror. Therefore, the ships do not need to stop moving.
Finally, the author of the reading states that the technology of Greeks did not improve yet to make burning mirror and why Greeks did not use flaming arrow that also could shoot at the enemies. The speaker, on the other hand, opposes this point by saying that enemies could not see the fire in the mirror of the burning mirror. Therefore, it was more effective to attack to the enemies.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 37, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
The reading and the speaker discuss whether or not the Greeks used burning mirror to defen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in fact, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1408.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 302.0 270.72406181 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66225165563 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28764575489 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 145.348785872 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456953642384 0.540411800872 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 419.4 419.366225166 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.1317223011 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.2222222222 110.228320801 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7777777778 21.698381199 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38888888889 7.06452816374 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360750561578 0.272083759551 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121920971285 0.0996497079465 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082731874876 0.0662205650399 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236586179156 0.162205337803 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487111171794 0.0443174109184 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.3589403974 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 53.8541721854 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.0289183223 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 12.2367328918 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.42419426049 84% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 63.6247240618 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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