There are certain considerations and factors for everyone to take into account to examine and investigate people’s opinion. I defiantly believe that celebrities’ opinions are more important to young people than they are to older people. To substantiate my case, the following paragraphs represent my conspicuous reasons to elaborate my preference.
To begin with, research claim that kids and teenager spend more time than older people in hobbies and activities for enjoyment, especially watching TV programs and surfing internet. In fact, this is because older people handle a lot more responsibility, busy with their jobs or take care of others in the family. In addition, young people receive repeated media, specifically celebrities’ thought. As a result, young people become influenced and convinced by these opinions. To illustrate, at first people have some resistant to new information they receive; however, if people are being told the same information many times, it is likely that they will trust that information.
Furthermore, when we consider that young people spend more time follow media and celebrities, we have to take into account that kids and teenage have their favorite entertainers such as, actors and singers. As a result, young people tend to think highly of celebrities’ opinion, and this is because people tend to trust everything from someone they admired. For instances, one famous youtuber dress appropriate in their video, a lot of young adult copy this behavior.
Finally, older people have more knowledge and experience so that they have sharp judgment to evaluate other’s opinions. This ability of judgement is opposite for young people. In fact, report suggest that young people are more easily to convince when it comes to celebrities marketing strategy. Marketer use famous entertainer to support good claim about products, so that audience can relate to familiar people to themselves.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 309, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
...elebrities marketing strategy. Marketer use famous entertainer to support good clai...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, however, if, so, for instance, in addition, in fact, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 300.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50666666667 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06101653413 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2948207675 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.133333333 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228249857525 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814780361101 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554328356673 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150633028401 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0248498033824 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 58.1214874552 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 10.1575268817 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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