it is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect you daily life
Butterfly effect is a term which describes how the fly of a butterfly in a part of the world can make a storm in opposite side of the world, and it is all due to this fact that everything in this world are closely related to each other. A decision some political men of a country make can influence the life of people in a far away country, and it proves why people should know about different news even if think they cannot affect their lives. In my view, there is need for all people to know about news in all part of the world, and I will elaborate on my opinion with the following reasons.
First and foremost, all events happening in the world are related to each other, even if they seem irrelevant at the first sight. Some century ago, people in the far distances had a rare contact with each other, and it made it unnecessary for them to follow up news in distant lands. Nowadays, are news are spread really quickly in the world and can make a deep effect on the life of so many people. The most noticeable events which all people need to follow them are all news related to most powerful countries like the United States and Russia which one of the decisions they make can change economical situations of all the world. As an example, I can mention my own country, Iran. For almost fourteen years, we have been sanctioned by The United States, and all of the rules this country make can deeply affect the value of our currency. We should check the news each day and make sure to not lose a news which may seem even irrelevant. To describe it more, I can mention one of the deals The united States made with china. This deal increased the need of china to Oil, and because Iran is the first oil supplier of this country, our currency value increased. This event was one of the reasons why I hold this idea that all happenings in the world are linked together.
Second, knowing about news all around the world helps people to think wiser and make better decisions. The key element in making good decisions is considering all different aspects and having the ability of predicting the future which is just feasible by knowing the news from all around the world. Having different information in mind helps people to see how different things can affect others. Moreover, it gives them a chance to make their decisions with open eyes, and enables them not to underestimate the importance of some events which may seem have any connection to their life. My own life experience is a compelling example of this point. Last year, I wanted to start my own job which was completely local. I believed I should know all my rivals and started to follow all the news which some of them seem unrelated to my work. Some month later, I heard a news from a company in China which was started to produce the product I was producing as well. As the result, I boosted my work and introduced my product to the marked sooner than the Chinese company. This leads to obtaining the biggest part of the market and was a big success for me.
To sum up, as all countries need to have a close connection to meet their needs, they will put deep effects on each other. This make in necessary for all to follow news from different countries. It can help people to be aware of how different issue which will affect their lives in the future and help them to take better decisions. Based on these points my conviction is that people should follow all the news even unrelated ones.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 763, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...en sanctioned by The United States, and all of the rules this country make can deeply affe...
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Line 6, column 864, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'news'.
Suggestion: news
...d to my work. Some month later, I heard a news from a company in China which was start...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, really, second, so, well, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 89.0 52.1666666667 171% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2828.0 1977.66487455 143% => OK
No of words: 636.0 407.700716846 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4465408805 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02185627292 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31259110257 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.411949685535 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 882.9 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1244325824 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.740740741 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5555555556 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177980991248 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0540561742364 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544187192353 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127681386085 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424555620108 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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