The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
There are number of unstated assumptions in this argument and a lot more data is needed to make any conclusion.
Starting with the statement that colleges enrolment will be doubled in 50 years, based on the current trends. The time period which is being taken into consideration is huge. How anybody can claim that the current trend will keep following the existing pattern for next 50 years. So we can not claim anything for long future because of the uncertainties associated with it. But we can take some think of near future like 5 years, do we need new housing for students or not according to the current trend. But for that also the data for number of existing students, number of housing apartments and expected numbers of enrolments is needed.
Secondly it has been mentioned that the average rent for an apartment in the town has increased. But what is that exact increase in numbers. Does it makes living in apartments in the town expansive as compared to living in housing facility in the college. So the comparison between the cost of living in apartments in the town and housing in the college, to influence the decision of making new housings.
At last it is stated that new dormitories will make future students interested in enrolling to Buckingham college. This statement looks flawed, as the students will be looking at the more important factors like faculty, research, courses, labs and infrastructure, during his enrolment. Yes students need a nice place to stay in the college campus but that can not be the primary motivator for them to join a college.
In conclusion, i think to reach to any decision of making new dormitories, the director of the student housing should make these assumptions clear and should collect more data as discussed.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Starting with the statement that colleges enrolment will be doubled in 50 years, based on the current trends.
Error: enrolment Suggestion: enrollment
Sentence: This statement looks flawed, as the students will be looking at the more important factors like faculty, research, courses, labs and infrastructure, during his enrolment.
Error: enrolment Suggestion: enrollment
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argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 302 350
No. of Characters: 1436 1500
No. of Different Words: 154 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.169 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.755 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.626 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.133 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.886 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.533 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.588 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 34, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'colleges'' or 'college's'?
Suggestion: colleges'; college's
...on. Starting with the statement that colleges enrolment will be doubled in 50 years, ...
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Line 5, column 150, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'make'?
Suggestion: make
...that exact increase in numbers. Does it makes living in apartments in the town expans...
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Line 5, column 150, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'make'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: make
...that exact increase in numbers. Does it makes living in apartments in the town expans...
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Line 5, column 286, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e college. So the comparison between the cost of living in apartments in the town...
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Line 9, column 16, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...em to join a college. In conclusion, i think to reach to any decision of makin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, look, second, secondly, so, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1478.0 2260.96107784 65% => OK
No of words: 302.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8940397351 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72124999334 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529801324503 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.806268849 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5333333333 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1333333333 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.06666666667 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235424321887 0.218282227539 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733025858505 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629009614043 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115676920262 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456279180468 0.0628817314937 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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