Once children start school, the teachers have more influence on their intellectual and social development than parents.To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Many people subscribe to the belief that educational institutions play a role more substantial than that of children’s parents in their intellectual and social upbringing. Personally, I tend to completely adhere to this viewpoint.

Supervised by pedagogical experts, children's cognitive skills grow as they participate in a variation of games and group studies. As pupils are frequently inquired to join a dazzling variety of groups in school, they are given the chance to experience taking up a number of diverse responsibilities in their little society; a golden opportunity which rarely comes up anywhere else. For instance, to be the captain of the basketball team or being the teacher's lab assistant are positions which can totally shape a child’s character.

On the other hand, adverse effects of being with peers which occasionally emerge Can take their toll on child's development. A fair share of people confesses being bullied at school and recall its drastic effects on their psyche and behavior to be long-lasting and difficult to deal with, regardless of their parents’ support and consolation. Moreover, positive results of peer pressure should also be taken into account when debating school’school's influence on children's intellectual and social behavior blooming. A number of credible researches have claimed the role of parental guidance to be less than 20 percent in shaping an individual’s character, while indicating this percentage for siblings and peers to be, more or less, 80.

In conclusion, the role of schools has proven to be of paramount significance in cultivating social and intellectual aspects of children, while parents’ influence, although substantial, can still not be considered as pivotal.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...ain of the basketball team or being the teachers lab assistant are positions which can t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, still, while, for instance, in conclusion, more or less, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.61797752809 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.40264594262 2.80592935109 121% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.644194756554 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.9758720863 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.0 106.682146367 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.8 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168208422478 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690886276495 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569874602086 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110851125752 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377458292733 0.056905535591 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.43 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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