Task 1 writing - Women employed in four countries

Covering an interval of twenty years, depicted in the graph is the percentage of the female population employed in USA, France, Afghanistan, and Korea from mid-eighties to 2005.

As the graph illustrates while more than 40 percent of women were employed in the USA in 1985, in France, Afghanistan, and Korea this rate was estimated 40, a little above 30 and 20, respectively.

While the trend experienced a steady rise for the USA, Afghanistan, and Korea during a course of the next five years featuring from 1985 to 1990, the percentage reached an all-time low of 30 for France.

As the line graph for the USA, Korea, and France takes a leap during the years of 1990 to 2000, the percentage falls for Afghanistan dramatically, to the point which it sinks to a through of approximately a little above 0 percent in 2005. Meanwhile, the graph shows a steady rise for the other three countries.

To sum up, according to the chart, all countries except Afghanistan, have a higher percentage of employed women by the end of 2005 than at the beginning of 1985. Moreover, the USA and France are the ones where the majority of women are employed.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 268, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt in 2005. Meanwhile, the graph shows a steady rise for the other three countrie...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
moreover, while, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 952.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 199.0 196.424390244 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78391959799 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75589349951 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82798962428 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532663316583 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 285.3 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.482926829268 828% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.4399420158 43.030603864 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.0 112.824112599 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4285714286 22.9334400587 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 5.23603664747 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0993388025035 0.215688989381 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554656004754 0.103423049105 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587729442051 0.0843802449381 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0651011061632 0.15604864568 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0693371797819 0.0819641961636 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.2329268293 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.4329268293 171% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.0658536585 181% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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