In any particular field currently there is always a pioneer who is regarded as the father of the subject. For example Charaka is considered as the father of Ayurveda, all the technique or the break through are obtained from his literature. In such response it would be clear that every development that is occuring is with or without the knowledge of the basis that is created or discovered by his predecessor. So, I agree with the fact that the past achievements of the strong influencer is of at most important for new breakthrough.
There is always a mentor or a source of help for a successful person or invention. For instance Swami Vivekananda had Ramakrishna Paramahamsa as his guru who taught him the path of a yogi, there are many others such instances like Ekalavya and Dronacharya, etc. The new invention is somehow related to the previous discoveries which form the bedrock of knowledge and guide. In the field of Automobile the first car was invented by Carl Benz, the four wheel vehicles that are now in market are no miracle but the improved and efficient model of the first car, the working method is same but the technology is upgraded. As for Carl Benz the idea of car as already present in the horse carriage he implemented the idea of engine [which was discovered by someone else] to replace the horse.
Although the person who first got idea of a particular field like the invention of wheel is unsure. That maybe the only drawback in the statement of the author which can have possible explanation. Another disagreement with the author's idea is that some people have a strong passion for the subject rather than the discovery or past knowledge. A good example is of Sir C.V. Raman who was poor Brahmin in India who had little knowledge of the past achievement and endeavor, he has given so much contribution in the field of mathematics without any guidance, it is astounding.
These kind of people are very rare so I would like to disregard that option for now and consider that much greater instance in which people have followed the pioneers in the field who existed before them as guide to their contribution. For the above two paragraph we can conclude that people require the assistance the predecessors work and achievement for new invention.
- Governments should offer a free university education to any student who has been admitted to a university but who cannot afford the tuition.Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning f 57
- Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be 58
- In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement 75
- TOEFL TPO 18 - Integrated Writing Task 86
- When schools do not have enough funding or teachers, some people think physical education classes should be cut, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Which do you think is preferable, and why? 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 377, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e knowledge of the basis that is created or discovered by his predecessor. So, I ...
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Line 1, column 419, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
...or discovered by his predecessor. So, I agree with the fact that the past achievements of the strong inf...
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Line 2, column 266, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'invention'.
Suggestion: invention
...like Ekalavya and Dronacharya, etc. The new invention is somehow related to the previous disc...
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Line 2, column 787, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... by someone else] to replace the horse. Although the person who first got idea of a part...
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Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...lanation. Another disagreement with the authors idea is that some people have a strong ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...ithout any guidance, it is astounding. These kind of people are very rare so I would like...
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Line 4, column 254, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'paragraph' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'paragraphs'.
Suggestion: paragraphs
...o their contribution. For the above two paragraph we can conclude that people require the...
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Line 4, column 319, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'predecessors'' or 'predecessor's'?
Suggestion: predecessors'; predecessor's
... that people require the assistance the predecessors work and achievement for new invention....
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Line 4, column 357, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'invention'.
Suggestion: invention
...e predecessors work and achievement for new invention.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, may, so, as for, for example, for instance, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1880.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 394.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77157360406 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76701434188 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51269035533 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8441627809 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.333333333 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2666666667 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202469861036 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659809557949 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048111337441 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126219239423 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060437922855 0.0667264976115 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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