Freindship is one of the indispensable part of our life. We need to communicate with others and make friends and be loved. While some believe maintaining few old friends are more important for having a happy life, others against it. In my opinion, although every old friend is like a precious gem that enrich our life , for having a happy life ,we need to make new friends due to changing situation in life, have more connection and better social comfort.
First of all, our life goes different stages and we have to adapt with any change in our life. For instance, when we grow up we go from high school to different university or college and then move to other place for job . Some have to change their city and even their country . Thus, even though in every stage of our life we may have special friends to hang out, making new friends is inevitable and necessary for us, unless we feel lonely and desperate. In fact, new friends in our workplace or college and so forth give us opportunity to get use to new environment and feel comfortable. In other words, without them we feel isolated, helpless and disappointed. Eventhough, we need time to trust our new friends and there would be misunderstanding in between, we learn how to be more flexible and easy going. Therefore, making new friends make our life more joyful.
Also, different friends have different point of views, thus, they broaden our perspective and make us open-minded. In other words, it is pleasant to learn how to see the things differently and from different scopes. This happens by making new friends with different ideas. Without friendship with variety of people, we grow very prejudiced. For instance, when I went to college and lived in dormitory, I made new friends there from different culture.It was interesting how we can change our view to improve ourselves and not be judgmental. After that, I felt differently about different cultures and understood that every culture has something that we can learn about. So, making new friends help us to be more experienced and be more mature.
Lastly, we live in the world of communication. Improving our social skills is very important for our satisfaction and success. Research study from Harvard university showed that people with greater and broader social connection live longer and healthier. Also, people with greater network of friends are more successful. So, Humans need to have social life which is collection of our friends and acquaintances. We need our friends and our social life to feel happy and depression is the result of loneliness and isolation. Thus, we need to make new friends during our life to feel happy and not feel as an outsider.
In conclusion, although we need to maintain our old friends due to their reliability and being more familiar with us, making new friends have advantages for living happily. Not only they grow our perspective and broaden our view, but also make our social life more prosperous. When we are surrounded by lots of friends, we would have more pleasure and happiness.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, lastly, may, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 33.0 13.8261648746 239% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2531.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 520.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86730769231 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71030059913 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448076923077 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 775.8 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.5525515029 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.275862069 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9310344828 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1724137931 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17070053029 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0689669675298 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056910540722 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128356600046 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0140109171683 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.