Nowadays, parents have less time to share with their children because of the super busy society. There is one controversial question coming up to parents that it is better to spend that little amount of time to help their children's homework or play with them and spend it as an enjoyable time. From my point of view, parents should make an imitation to the children is beneficial for both the children and the parents rather than teaching them schoolwork.
Above all, memory is the only thing that left when time passes. So, it is better to do fun activities with children because it is the most valuable memory of childhood. In contrast, when parents helping or teaching a school staff to their children, they usually get angry which leaves no memory and imitation to the child. From my personal experience, I confidently say that the spending time with parents becomes rarer when a child grows up. As a result, some invisible hole appears between their relationship and the only key to make that hole narrow is the fun memory. Moreover, if parents can give an understanding of responsibility to their child, they have no trouble to deal with the schoolwork.
Another reason is, in school, children get enough academic knowledge, so, the main duty of parents turns to teach morality and encourage their children to find themselves. Because parents are busy nowadays, most children have a lack of information that brings the struggle to them in making crucial decisions of life. I think the parents should have a friendly conversation with their child during their free time to sustain them with love, support and most importantly an information about how to make a right choice. For example, according to the result of one research, most people choose their major because they like it, not because they have a passion. Nonetheless, success is the product of hard work and effort that are the result of passion.
All in all, parents are the people who build the child from the sight of personality, not a people who only encourage them academically.
- “When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.” Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position. 66
- Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The decisions that people make quickly are always wrong Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion 93
- TOELF TPO 22 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Telephone has greater influence on people’s lives than television has. 76
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, nonetheless, so, for example, i think, in contrast, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1712.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90544412607 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63798051998 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498567335244 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 517.5 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7765625848 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.133333333 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2666666667 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13333333333 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281593092081 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104934558622 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657423944864 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174036009699 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800142104951 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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