It is a highly debated issue whether or not making a new friend, and due to the complexity of the question. I will explain my ideas from different angles. I agree that everyone should keep and protect his friendship rather than making the new one, I have many reasons for that.
First of all, our friends are worthwhile and precious, so we have to keep this friendship till death. Take my self as an example, my friend name Eklass, I still remembered for the first time when I met her in the student's center in the college of pharmacy in 1999. I was frustrated with the applications and admissions stuff, and she assisted me at that time by explaining to me how I had to take everything in my consideration the roommate characteristics and the transportation before applying for the dormitory. Since that time, we still keep this friendship, and each time I see her, I enjoyed each moment with her. We went together to the gym between day and other, we workout and discuss a lot of information related to our life and spend a wonderful time there. So for me, I will not jeopardize my self in the new friendship especially nowadays, because I can not guarantee the moral behavior of the people. Obviously, I think peoples now are vast differences from people twenty years ago.
Second, my friend is trustworthy, so I can not trust the new friend like the old one. For instance, I made a new friend after I got my job in the IDGP pharmacy. Her name is Sara, I trusted her so much, and I discussed with her most of my problems with my husband. Then after several months, I suddenly opened my husband's cell phone, I shocked with what I saw and heard in the message, She cheated me. I realized that never and ever trust anyone in the world with personal life.
As a conclusion, keeping the old friend is better than making the new one for the trusty and enjoyment reasons.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
no serious flaws found. you may put less pronouns like: I , we....as the subject of sentences.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 341 350
No. of Characters: 1487 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.297 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.361 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.614 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 95 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 69 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.312 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.523 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.405 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.566 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.217 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 30, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
It is a highly debated issue whether or not making a new friend, and due to the com...
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Line 2, column 998, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fferences from people twenty years ago. Second, my friend is trustworthy, so I c...
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Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ith what I saw and heard in the message, She cheated me. I realized that never an...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...yone in the world with personal life. As a conclusion, keeping the old friend ...
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Line 4, column 115, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e for the trusty and enjoyment reasons.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, still, then, while, for instance, i think, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1530.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48680351906 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68422495256 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557184750733 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.597251836 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.625 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3125 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196836758829 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695394285193 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390188471558 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134298500908 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0149512895024 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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