There is a great common concern between parents about children's grades. Most of them think that the grades are the exact result of the child's work in the school and some of them think that it is a good way to persuade them to try harder in school by giving them money for every high grade they get. However, I disagree with this idea and I will provide some reasons for support my idea.
The first and the foremost reason is that when a child gets money for every good grade he gets in the school, because of the lack of maturity, he/she expects a reward for any good thing that he/she does in his/her life. This speculation will reside in his/her mind forever. Additionally, they will not do anything unless there are some rewards for that. So the consequences are severe on the future of the society.
Another drawback of this idea is that it turns the children into people who work only for themselves and have no sense of helpfulness and kindness. I should mention one of my experiences about this false idea. My cousin is 7 years old now. Last year, his parents gave him a toy for every high grade he got from his teachers in the school. After a year, he was so selfish that he did not want to do a simple work for anyone.
However, this approach has an advantage. The good point is if they know they will be rewarded if they try hard, they will do a great job in the school. In fact, the reward encourages them to learn more and more in the school and try harder to get higher grades. This will makes them hard working people in the future. There is a general consensus about this benefit between people.
To conclude, there are several advantages and disadvantages about persuading children with some rewards to study harder but as I mentioned earlier, the advantages are far more powerful than the disadvantages and there are several consequences of exerting this idea. So I think this approach should not be executed.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 273, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
... harder to get higher grades. This will makes them hard working people in the future....
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Line 7, column 330, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'consensus'.
Suggestion: consensus
...orking people in the future. There is a general consensus about this benefit between people. T...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, i think, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52421652422 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37003476695 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490028490028 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 491.4 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.466406771 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5789473684 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4736842105 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.36842105263 5.45110844103 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302466175852 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835420077701 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628927723184 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175889305077 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0756157886384 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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