People hold different view toward the events happening all over the world. Society generally believes that we should just focus on problems which are related to our community. I found this vision problematic because I would rather know more about world news. In my opinion, despite it may not affect my life at that moment, it may have consequences on my life in the future. There are several reasons for this point of view. The most outstanding reasons will be explicated hereunder.
To begin with, every event has a subtle lesson with it. This can be regarded as a persuasive reason to be explained. Delving further into this issue can reveal the importance of international news. All accidents and happening can teach us a useful lesson that we can use it in our live. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I can recall three months ago there was a massive earthquake in Afghanistan which had an enormous death toll. Maybe it does not affect my life that day, and I have not lost anything at all, but I could imagine myself in their shoes and think of how a life can be altered to death in a minute. From that day, I always remember that I should appreciate the moments that I spend with my family and be aware of the value of time in my life.
Another point which is equally significant, if not more, is that events which do not have any effect in my daily life can have consequences in the future. By being aware of what is happening in the world, you gain more experience, and you are more ready to deal with the same probable difficulties in future. For instance, when you read about a flood that happened in another region and how people could survive it, it can be useful for a time you may probably stick in flood. Thus, it is intrusive, and you cannot assure that they will not happen for you never.
All details considered, I am convinced that knowing about the world's events is very useful for our life. However, this fact might not be overgeneralized to all conditions. Being aware of events that seem unrelated to us, can be beneficial in our present and future life. It can broaden the perspective of people through life and make them ready for possible events that can happen for them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 299, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...eal with the same probable difficulties in future. For instance, when you read about a fl...
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Line 5, column 557, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[3]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
...ssure that they will not happen for you never. All details considered, I am convi...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ssible events that can happen for them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, thus, for instance, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1826.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5536159601 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51583995665 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516209476309 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6624778058 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2272727273 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.40909090909 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188901302005 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612601782655 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394023036477 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127546997136 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022506903695 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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