There is no doubt in the fact that the most important role in shaping a child's future is that of the parents. However, there are a few individuals who believe that there are many other social factors outside the family that influence the progress of the child. Both the views will be discussed in detail before I give my opinion.
To begin with, the foremost reason that the supporters of former view give is that students today are able to access a lot of information from the online videos and blogs of experts from different fields. Nonetheless, they can also watch violent movies and play video games which waste their time and also corrupt their naive minds. With the increase in the number of social networking sites, it is easy to make friends with anyone without knowing about their background. The company that a child has also determine the traits of his character as peer pressure also influences the actions of a child.
On the other hand, the argument put forward by believers of second opinion is that a child spends most of its time with its family. The parents know about the strengths and weaknesses of their wards and are most suitable for making best decisions for them. A child also derives its moral education at its home on the initial basis. The child who is able to communicate with his parents and siblings efficiently is able to make friends easily and also gains confidence. Hence, a positive and friendly environment within a family is indispensable to raise a child healthily.
Thus, in order to draw a conclusion, I would like to assert that both family and social surroundings of a child play a crucial part in growth and development of a child. They also help to determine the behaviour of a child when it reaches adulthood.
Therefore, parents and teachers should work together and take care that the child's future is not disturbed by any of the social factors surrounding him.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 424, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an healthy manner" with adverb for "healthy"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...amily is indispensable to raise a child in an healthy manner. Thus, in order to draw a conclusion...
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Line 5, column 427, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ly is indispensable to raise a child in an healthy manner. Thus, in order to dr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, nonetheless, second, so, thus, no doubt, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1208.0 1615.20841683 75% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66409266409 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48051394259 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583011583012 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 374.4 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6274046357 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.666666667 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5833333333 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187243279388 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686441990902 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609368302996 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118960070329 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0711557956186 0.056905535591 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 50.2224549098 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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