You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter :
1) Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college.
2) Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her.
3) Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her.
Dear Jack,
I've received your letter last night after coming back from my office and I'd say you must throw a party as you've got the chance at Westwood College. Anyway, congratulations on your brilliant success!
In your letter, you've expressed a dilemma on going to the college for the masters degree, rather you've shown a little interest in getting a job. Well, if you ask me, I'd suggest postponing your study plan and start looking for a job more seriously. Let me explain it more clearly.
First of all, you had a plan to do your masters degree on Cyber Security, but unfortunately, you have got Robotics which you don't like. Why should you spend your next two years for a boring subject that you don't like? Rather, you should try to get a job that matches your interests. This will match with your passion and you can get both experience and some financial back-up. Maybe one or two years later, you can enroll for diploma courses on your dream subjects. I'll simply recommend you to stick to www.indeed.com where you can have a lot of job opening for IT firms.
Anyway, I must get off now. I'll call you next weekend during my free time and will talk more on these issues. Till then, take care.
Bye for now.
Sam.
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Comments
Dear Concern,
Dear Concern,
For your kind observations, all the contractions have been written properly in the text and unfortunately, the e-grader is not being able to read them at all. I have tried twice and failed to justify why this is happening. I am seeking your kind attention to it.
I look forward to resolving it at your end as soon as possible.
Yours faithfully,
itsshuvro
I have read your essay and
I have read your essay and will give it 5.5 out of 9. The main issue is that it is not exactly right on the topic. Let me explain.
If I am going to write this essay, I will give this structure:
paragraph 1: introduction.
paragraph 2: Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college. reason 1....reason 2....
paragraph 3: Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her. reason 1....reason 2....
paragraph 4: Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her. my suggesion, then reason 1....reason 2....
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while your issues:
issue 1: paragraph 1 and paragraph 2 together as introduction are too much for an introduction. It doesn't need to make a story. The introduction should be something simple like this:
I received a letter from you and asked for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. I think you should get a job first.
issues 2: you used one paragraph (the third paragraph) for 1) 2) 3) together:
1) Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college.
2) Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her.
3) Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her.
you are good at 1) Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college.,
but where is the content for 2) Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her. ?
for 3) Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her. it is out of topic. we will need to suggest him/her types of job first , like IT job. and then explain why IT job is good for him/her. while you suggested him/her where to find this job.
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hope this can help you.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
Dear Jack, Ive received your letter last night after c...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'd
...ht after coming back from my office and Id say you must throw a party as youve got...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: you've
...ce and Id say you must throw a party as youve got the chance at Westwood College. Any...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: you've
...r brilliant success! In your letter, youve expressed a dilemma on going to the col...
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Line 5, column 43, Rule ID: ON_GOING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'ongoing'?
Suggestion: ongoing
... your letter, youve expressed a dilemma on going to the college for the masters degree, ...
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Line 5, column 98, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: you've
... college for the masters degree, rather youve shown a little interest in getting a jo...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'd
... in getting a job. Well, if you ask me, Id suggest postponing your study plan and ...
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Line 7, column 126, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...nately, you have got Robotics which you dont like. Why should you spend your next tw...
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Line 7, column 208, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...two years for a boring subject that you dont like? Rather, you should try to get a j...
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Line 7, column 467, Rule ID: ILL_I_LL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
...diploma courses on your dream subjects. Ill simply recommend you to stick to www.in...
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Line 7, column 538, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun job seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of jobs'.
Suggestion: a lot of jobs
...ck to www.indeed.com where you can have a lot of job opening for IT firms. Anyway, I must...
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Line 9, column 29, Rule ID: ILL_I_LL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
...T firms. Anyway, I must get off now. Ill call you next weekend during my free ti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, first, if, look, may, so, then, well, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 0.0 7.48453608247 0% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1014.0 937.175257732 108% => OK
No of words: 222.0 206.0 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56756756757 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34725749031 2.54303337028 92% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 127.690721649 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.653153153153 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 295.2 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0845564482 44.8134815571 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.4285714286 76.5299724578 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8571428571 16.8248392259 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 4.34317383033 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 2.54639175258 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320329287537 0.216113520407 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105385930119 0.0766984524023 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731284205772 0.0603063233224 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169724220062 0.12726935374 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.071419492529 0.0580467560999 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 8.37731958763 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 70.7449484536 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.93 8.71597938144 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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