TPO 54 Integrated Writing

The reading and the lecture are both about the ways of reducing salt in the Salton Sea in California. The author of the reading presents three solutions to reduce the salt content in the lake. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made in the article by saying that those three ways are not realistic and practical.

First and foremost, the article states that the salt content could be reduced by desalination process. It is mentioned that this process would evaporate the water and get mixed into the stream at the same time other solid materials are remained. The lecturer is challenged by the statement. She says that the desalination process would lead to other concern where solid material that is present may contain chemicals that are toxic can lead to serious health problems to human.

Secondly, the author contends by referring to diluting the salts water by bringing with Pacific Ocean water by constructing pipelines or canals. The lecturer rebuts this statement. She argues that the in order to build canals or pipeline which would incur more resources that are very In addition to that Pacific ocean is 100 km away from Salton lake where it will be very expensive to build canals or pipelines.

Last but not least, the author states that the salinity of the ocean could be reduced by building walls to make sections. The sections can separate water with more salt content in one section and other sections with less salt content. The lecturer, on the other Hand posits that this method would not work because the area is more prone to frequent geological destruction where it can break the walls. As a result, the chances are the water can be get mixed together in the event of earthquake because of broken wall that can’t last longer.

Votes
Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 194, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...to reduce the salt content in the lake. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, in addition, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 5.04856512141 257% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1468.0 1373.03311258 107% => OK
No of words: 302.0 270.72406181 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86092715232 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38570586494 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506622516556 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 449.1 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8460896466 49.2860985944 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.857142857 110.228320801 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 21.698381199 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 7.06452816374 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.2367328918 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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