Televised talent shows have become popular in many societies today. Are there shows a good method of finding talented people, or are they just entertainment? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
Nowadays, some countries has myriad television industries TV show especially about talent show. They are really make people who watch that TV show being entertaining and make them always talk about it like a hot issues. However, it seems they are keen for people who joining with this TV talent and being popular directly.
In Indonesia, there are so many talent shows on television. For example, Indonesian Idol talent show. Hundreds people watch it and being addicted when they see it. This TV exhibition are very glorious. There are talented people who can singing in a good way, and famous talented judge who give a judge for them. This TV show always perform once a week. Beside that, Indonesian people mostly like too seeing if they or their family comes on television. That is why thousand Indonesian people watch them. If one of them being a winner, she or he will get a lot of money. The winner come from a judgement and vote from inhabitants who watch it.
In the past, people could be a famous person with their struggle and pushed their talent in their way. Such as, meet tv producer or joined in some audition directly. It was a hard way to be famous talented person in the past. But now, it is very easy to make our self being a famous person. Just join at talent show and perform our talent. If you can win this, you will be a well-known person and get a lot of money.
In a conclusion, I think we can get more gain to take talent show. We can raise our talent in television from talent show and we can amusing people who view us. Although, folks dislike if someone get enviable easier.
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