These days we use a lot of modern technology that makes our lives eaiser. But has this technology really improved our lives? In my opinion there are advantages and disadvantages.
Currently, modern technology has big effects on our life. Opinions are divided as to whether these effects are positive or not, but it is my firm conviction that technology is between both of sides.
First off all, technology makes our life easier day after day during its improvement. There are many means, which influences our dayly life, about mobile phones. Due to the fact that mobile phones are always with us and it means that they consist of required information for us. On the other hand, thanks to technology is improved, also many mortal sicknesses can be treated by scientists. That is why improvement of technology is one of the most considerable issues.
It should also be noted that, there are some disadvantages in improving technology. For example, as much as I remember the boy, who is in his seventeens, died because of spending a much more time -aproximately 24 hours- in front of his computer. We also can witness this kind of pozitions about technology. It is just a matter of impoving in technology that governments can destroy areas of each others during their arguments or wars. There are results of improved technology that make me disagree with it.
All in all, I am not hesitating to confess that, when I juxtapose both of them, I witness that especially governments should not use technology in destruction. Because progress is much more important than slaughter, and we should try to progress, to flourish.
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