"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
In the above letter to the editor of Balmer Island Gazatte the author requests of immediate implementation of reduction in number of mopeds rented during summer season by 50 percent. In favour of his argument he relates the number of accidents occurring with the increase in population during summer and more number of mopeds. He also states the example of Seaville to support his claim. But according to me the author has based his arguments on insignificant facts and irrelevant data and information. There are various shortcomings in this assertion.
Firstly, author states a paradox in the very first line of the paragraph. According to the author moped is a very popular form of transportation on the island. Reduction in number of mopeds will only subside the economic development of the island. As stated as a popular form of transportation, moped renting might have a significant role in revenue generation on the island. Also, the author has not mentioned the precise number of tourists using mopeds. It is absolutely plausible that the ratio of mopeds used to accidents caused by mopeds is quite less.
Secondly, the author has not mentioned lucidly the area and initial population of the island. Probably the number of mopeds rented is far less than the maximum quantity of mopeds that can be set in the city. It is also not clear that accidents involving pedestrians and mopeds are due to large number of mopeds rented. Lack of traffic regulation in the city or lack of concentration of pedestrians could be responsible for the accidents. Moreover, it is not clear that by reducing number of mopeds, the accidents will also cease. It would just reduce economic development of the moped rental companies.
Finally, in the last line author has compared the same situation with Seaville. According to the author, by reducing number of rented mopeds in the city of Seaville, number of accidents occurring had reduced. But here no similarities in both cities have been cited. It is possible that Seaville has far less population during summer which obviates the necessity of more mopeds, or smaller area as compared to Balmer. In either of these cases, the result that was achieved in Seaville cannot be hoped to be achieved in Balmer. The author must put forward a more convincing study to implement reduction in moped renting.
Hence, by thorough study of all the aspects of the city and accurate survey of citizens is required to build a concrete argument. A detailed study of causes of accidents is also required to strengthen the case.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 427 350
No. of Characters: 2080 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.546 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.871 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.713 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.08 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.268 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.44 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.31 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.492 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 55.5748502994 139% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 427.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00468384075 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78556046681 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459016393443 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.8457841528 57.8364921388 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.48 119.503703932 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.08 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.32 5.70786347227 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315800264338 0.218282227539 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874280644231 0.0743258471296 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0792030600869 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168924196295 0.128457276422 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.083571626276 0.0628817314937 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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