Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
That nowadays evaluate the type of career or job in order to recognize a successful future profoundly is a principle. However, rarely the appropriate job can find to guarantee future life. Though, some people strongly believe that today it is easy to distinguish what type of works lead to a better future. Nevertheless, I believe that it is difficult to determine a suitable career or job in order to have a successful future. The following reasons would elaborate on the thesis.
First of all, one of the persuasive reasons that authenticate the thesis is that economic condition plays a key role to identify the future of job or career. Therefore, It would not be too great an exaggeration to say that nowadays, due to the increasing population with high-level education, many people lose their job and face difficulty to find the best position in other companies. As a matter of fact, an employer prefers to hire an employee with upper-level education instead of people with rudimentary education and experience. As an illustration, a computer company in my country select employee who has a huge knowledge and experience of the new trend of programming languages. Thus, the employee should enhance their knowledge and education to assure their career and job in the future.
In addition, the rate of the population with vast knowledge and experience has a direct influence on declining job position. To clarify, the number of people who request the job is increasing and companies do not have an adequate position for this huge population. Broadly speaking, since all younger people try to improve their ability in some area, if they cannot find a proper position, they will not expect to have a secure job and a successful future. For instance, my company had one position to hire one person, but the huge number of people with a great level of education requested for this position with a low salary. Hence, by increasing the population, the opportunity to find a secure job will decline.
As a consequence, although there are many who believe that predict the secure job and successful future is easier than the past. I disagree. I think people in order to keep their job and ensure their future should update their education every day. I strongly believe that the duplication of the world population has a negative effect to identify the successful future.
- TPO-48 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
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- TOEFL T P O 47 - Integrated Writing Task 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'evaluates'.
Suggestion: evaluates
That nowadays evaluate the type of career or job in order to r...
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Line 1, column 190, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... job can find to guarantee future life. Though, some people strongly believe that toda...
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Line 5, column 266, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Broadly
...uate position for this huge population. broadly speaking, since all younger people try ...
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Line 7, column 249, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hould update their education every day. I strongly believe that the duplication o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, thus, broadly speaking, for instance, i think, in addition, as a matter of fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 8.0752688172 359% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98236775819 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87089568173 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468513853904 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4388365508 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.888888889 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0555555556 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88888888889 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207039625789 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715124033177 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467998115027 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137705580977 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558377416279 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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