In this statement, the author makes a conclusion that the miniatures will be more valubale than the life-size sculptures on Kali Island. To support the concusion, the author shows that the archaeologist have recently discovered the molds of human heads and hands on Kali, this means that the old kalinese use molds of actual bodies instead of sculpting tools and skills to make these sculptures. While there is few sculpting tools have been found ,the minatures are also abstract and different in style. This conclusion is problematic. There are some loopholes in it, let's reexamine them carefully.
To begin with, the author dose not prove the molds used to create these sculptures. Given that there were some molds in life-size found by the archaeologists , the author assumes the sculptures were made from them while it is unconvicing.May be these molds had other uses like for the people who broken the legs and the for mummies even possiblly.
To prove this point, the author should show us the evidence that the molds conform the life-size sculptrues precisely. In this way , this assumption would be tenable.
In addtion, the tools found by the archaeologist was asserted by them that they are used to crave the minatures. While this is problematic because nobody regulated the tools must be used to crave the small ones instead of the big ones in that the process of making life-size sculptures is still in question. Without obvious evidence, the argument that the tools were exclusively for make small ones is not compelling.Moreover, the author tells us few of the tools have been found, so they were exclusively for the miniatures. But without comprehensive studies and researching, the tools may be also used to create the big ones.
So the author should find out more covincing supportment to prove this point. For example ,the subsequent discovery that some acient books in Kali which teaching people how to carve big or small sculptures could tell us more about the tools.
Finally, the comparison of the price between the big and small sculptures is unfounded by the evidence shows above, meanwhile there are other possiblities for the origin of these sculptures. For example. the minatures were brought outside, while the Life-size were indeed make by molds, thus the price of the life-size sculpture will be more valuable, and vice versa.
In all, the conslusion that the minature will be more valuable is not compelling, there is no obvious evidence to support this assumption. If the author want to compare the price of the two kinds of sculptures, there will be more work to to. Firstly, make clear the procedure of the two kinds scuptures, hence the use of molds and tools would be clear. Secondly, the price of the sculptures will be determined by sevral facts, so it is necessary to compare the specifics of them.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In this statement, the author makes a conclusion that the miniatures will be more valubale than the life-size sculptures on Kali Island.
Error: valubale Suggestion: valuable
Error: life-size Suggestion: lifetime
Sentence: To support the concusion, the author shows that the archaeologist have recently discovered the molds of human heads and hands on Kali, this means that the old kalinese use molds of actual bodies instead of sculpting tools and skills to make these sculptures.
Error: kalinese Suggestion: lines
Error: sculpting Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: archaeologist Suggestion: archeologist
Error: concusion Suggestion: confusion
Sentence: While there is few sculpting tools have been found ,the minatures are also abstract and different in style.
Error: sculpting Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: minatures Suggestion: miniatures
Sentence: Given that there were some molds in life-size found by the archaeologists , the author assumes the sculptures were made from them while it is unconvicing.May be these molds had other uses like for the people who broken the legs and the for mummies even possiblly.
Error: life-size Suggestion: lifetime
Error: possiblly Suggestion: possibly
Error: unconvicing Suggestion: unconvincing
Sentence: To prove this point, the author should show us the evidence that the molds conform the life-size sculptrues precisely.
Error: sculptrues Suggestion: sculptures
Error: life-size Suggestion: lifetime
Sentence: In this way , this assumption would be tenable.
Error: tenable Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In addtion, the tools found by the archaeologist was asserted by them that they are used to crave the minatures.
Error: minatures Suggestion: miniatures
Error: addtion Suggestion: addition
Error: archaeologist Suggestion: archeologist
Sentence: While this is problematic because nobody regulated the tools must be used to crave the small ones instead of the big ones in that the process of making life-size sculptures is still in question.
Error: life-size Suggestion: lifetime
Sentence: But without comprehensive studies and researching, the tools may be also used to create the big ones.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: So the author should find out more covincing supportment to prove this point.
Error: supportment Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: covincing Suggestion: convincing
Sentence: For example ,the subsequent discovery that some acient books in Kali which teaching people how to carve big or small sculptures could tell us more about the tools.
Error: acient Suggestion: accent
Sentence: Finally, the comparison of the price between the big and small sculptures is unfounded by the evidence shows above, meanwhile there are other possiblities for the origin of these sculptures.
Error: possiblities Suggestion: possibilities
Sentence: For example. the minatures were brought outside, while the Life-size were indeed make by molds, thus the price of the life-size sculpture will be more valuable, and vice versa.
Error: minatures Suggestion: miniatures
Error: life-size Suggestion: lifetime
Sentence: In all, the conslusion that the minature will be more valuable is not compelling, there is no obvious evidence to support this assumption.
Error: conslusion Suggestion: conclusion
Error: minature Suggestion: miniature
Sentence: Firstly, make clear the procedure of the two kinds scuptures, hence the use of molds and tools would be clear.
Error: scuptures Suggestion: sculptures
Sentence: Secondly, the price of the sculptures will be determined by sevral facts, so it is necessary to compare the specifics of them.
Error: sevral Suggestion: several
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 21 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 478 350
No. of Characters: 2304 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.676 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.82 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.557 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.762 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.574 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.156 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 447, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e is few sculpting tools have been found ,the minatures are also abstract and diff...
^^
Line 4, column 158, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...in life-size found by the archaeologists , the author assumes the sculptures were ...
^^
Line 4, column 239, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: May
... made from them while it is unconvicing.May be these molds had other uses like for ...
^^^
Line 4, column 243, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...e from them while it is unconvicing.May be these molds had other uses like for the...
^^
Line 5, column 130, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e-size sculptrues precisely. In this way , this assumption would be tenable. In...
^^
Line 7, column 85, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to craving'.
Suggestion: used to craving
...gist was asserted by them that they are used to crave the minatures. While this is problemati...
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Line 7, column 418, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Moreover
...y for make small ones is not compelling.Moreover, the author tells us few of the tools ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 427, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e small ones is not compelling.Moreover, the author tells us few of the tools hav...
^^
Line 8, column 89, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ortment to prove this point. For example ,the subsequent discovery that some acien...
^^
Line 10, column 205, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...rigin of these sculptures. For example. the minatures were brought outside, while t...
^^^
Line 10, column 273, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'made'.
Suggestion: made
...utside, while the Life-size were indeed make by molds, thus the price of the life-si...
^^^^
Line 12, column 236, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
... of sculptures, there will be more work to to. Firstly, make clear the procedure of t...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, for example, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2378.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 476.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99579831933 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75775388523 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441176470588 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 735.3 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.7045258011 57.8364921388 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.238095238 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.19047619048 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139715608439 0.218282227539 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0403535601236 0.0743258471296 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543655637714 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0750216739785 0.128457276422 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573119027951 0.0628817314937 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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