It is argued that, in order to keep on running the Rialto Movie Theater, more importantly to hold on to the share of a decreasing pool of moviegoers, the manager of the theater suggests the Rialto should equip with the same features as Apex Theater. To support the idea of manager, he tells us the merits of the Apex including the video arcade, plush carpeting and seats as well as advanced sound system. Also, the manager represents a recent survey showed over 85 percent of respondents reported the new released movies ticket is too expensive that they cannot afford to go to the theater. While this statement is problematic, there are some loopholes in it, we should evaluate them carefully.
To begin with, the two theaters are not comparable. Firstly, the age of the two theaters are totally different in high possiblity. As the Apex was just opened last year, there should be more advanced equipment like sound system and new seats in it due. While we do not know how long has the Rialto opened which should be more than one year, so the conditions of the two theaters confront with are more or less different, that's enough to make up two stories for them. Secondly, the locations are different likewise. Given the Rialto locates at downtown which seem to be a merit, while the Theater described by the author is about to close its door. On the other hand, the new opening Apex Theater locates in the mall outside the town is running well which attracts the author's attention deeply. Due to the opposite conditions of the two theaters, there must be other reasons for the Rialto's repression.
In addition, when exploring the other reason for the repression of Rialto, the author turns to a recent survey, but it is also not helpful in that there is no obvious evidence to support the idea. Firstly, it is because of the "recently". We do not know when did the survey begin as well as the end. The report likewise did not mention the specific time. So it would be a report of the survey five years ago which has no value of reference. Secondly and foremost, most of the people responded the survey complained that the ticket price of the new movie is too high to afford. Here is the question that whether the respondents were true. Because it is human nature when asked the about the products' price, people always complain the expensiveness of them.
In conclusion, the recommendation is not well supported by the author. To make the suggestion more persuasive, the author should research the theater of his to find out what caused the
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 448 350
No. of Characters: 2045 1500
No. of Different Words: 218 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.601 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.565 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.417 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.364 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.611 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.283 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.457 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 422, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...nfront with are more or less different, thats enough to make up two stories for them....
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Line 3, column 769, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...town is running well which attracts the authors attention deeply. Due to the opposite c...
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Line 5, column 474, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lue of reference. Secondly and foremost, most of the people responded the survey ...
^^
Line 7, column 185, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eater of his to find out what caused the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, likewise, second, secondly, so, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, more or less, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2114.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 448.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71875 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61530949411 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502232142857 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1267198194 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0909090909 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3636363636 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36363636364 5.70786347227 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216142893443 0.218282227539 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564563620159 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621140922519 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122877696188 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585207051982 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 12.3882235529 137% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.