It is argued that, in order to reduce the patients' chance of continuing to suffer the heart problems and reduce the necessity of more treatment, the author suggests that the Sherwood hospital and Sherwood Animal Shelter should cooperate to start a program which let the patients with heart disease adopt dogs because of the survey in the statement concluded that people who have pets especially dogs would suffer less heart disease. Furthermore, this program could encourage more people to adopt the pets from the shelter who would suffer less heart conditions as well. However, the suggestion and program are problematic, because there are some loopholes. Let's evaluate them carefully.
To begin with, the report showed by the author is not compelling as the details of the study are obsecure, this would misguide the people who read this statement as if it works as an evidence to prove the author's idea. Firstly, the author does not tell us how many people meanwhile where are they from as as well as the sex ratio in this study, it is so opaque which was merely the result concluded by the autho that we could not make the conclusion that the pet's owener suffer less heart disease. Secondly, the kinds of pets are not mentioned comprehensively in the study, even if the therapy of adopting dogs works, we still do not know how better is the method of keeping dogs than other pets like cats, in this case, there may be some other conclusion like the cat adopting also works in reducing the owners heart conditions.Thirdly and foremost, the atuhor does not make clear wheher rasing dogs is benificial for the owners with heart disease or the owners without the disease or the ones about to have the disease. Due to the different periods of the diesease, the effect of the adopting dogs may vary if it really works, while here is another point that obsecures us.
In addtion, let's develve into the cooperating program which intends to let patients with heart disease. As we do not know what the sherwood animal shelter's conditon by the author, thus whether the pets there are healthy is in question. It is precarious for the patients getting in touch with unhealthy pets especiall dogs which may carry rabid disease, if they contaminate t othe patients, the program is doomed. Morevoer, there is a high possbility that some of the patients with heart disease afraid of dogs even alergic of them, so it is also unpolitic for them to adopt dogs by which means may bring about other troubles.
Finally, the future program will encourage more people to adopt pets from the shelter which could also deduce the people's chance for getting heart disease. Before making clear whtether the theray of adopting pets is available as we discussed above, the people may also be afraid of pets even alergic of them. So the statement is not compelling.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 490 350
No. of Characters: 2310 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.705 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.714 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.313 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.784 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.522 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.174 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 658, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...atic, because there are some loopholes. Lets evaluate them carefully. To begin wi...
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Line 3, column 206, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...if it works as an evidence to prove the authors idea. Firstly, the author does not tell...
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Line 3, column 303, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: as
...ny people meanwhile where are they from as as well as the sex ratio in this study, it...
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Line 3, column 806, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'owners'' or 'owner's'?
Suggestion: owners'; owner's
...cat adopting also works in reducing the owners heart conditions.Thirdly and foremost, ...
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Line 3, column 830, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thirdly
...in reducing the owners heart conditions.Thirdly and foremost, the atuhor does not make ...
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Line 5, column 456, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...revoer, there is a high possbility that some of the patients with heart disease afraid of d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2361.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 489.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8282208589 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4501367193 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431492842536 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 728.1 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 130.986750814 57.8364921388 226% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 157.4 119.503703932 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.6 23.324526521 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6 5.70786347227 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206213939735 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654159481636 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566097325422 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132751362593 0.128457276422 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394673523216 0.0628817314937 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 14.3799401198 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 48.3550499002 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.33 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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