It goes without saying that in sophisticated and radically progressive era in which we live, all human beings have always been involved in a great struggle to use his leisure time greatly to gain much information and experience about different aspects of life. Whereas some individuals debate that it would be better for all people to learn how to play a sport or a musical instrument, on the other side of the continuum, stand others, believing that people need to get experience during their leisure time by taking part-time jobs or participating voluntarily in communities. As far as I am concerned, I categorically concur with the second mental attitude. In the ensuing essay, my perspective will be perspicuously substantiated by the underlying and conspicuous reasons.
To begin with, no one casts a shadow of doubt on the fact that if a person wants to become prosperous and successful in the near future, he will need to get experience and improve his creativity. These two mentioned factors will be obtained by taking part in group meetings or finding a part-time job. Consequently, all juveniles can easily use their free time after school to perform one of the mentioned lucrative works. An example can shed some light on the subject. Several years ago when I was studying at the University of Melbourne, my father told me that you should find a part-time job opportunity to become familiar with your field of study, get experience and also enhance your creativity in your work. He further discussed if an individual wants to be a beneficial person for his society, he needs to learn different topics related to his field study. Therefore, I motivated to work as a researcher in the Tesla Company without earning much money.
Moreover, it is crystal clear that experience plays a momentous role in human’s life in the near future and helps him become prosperous and successful in the near future. All people are in consensus with the mental attitude that if an individual does not have any experience in his job, he will not be able to get a higher promotion in his job or specifically find a prestigious job. An example can derive this notion dramatically home. In the aforementioned example, the experiences that I achieved form my part-time job in the Tesla Company assisted me to become a well-experienced person in the design of plots by AutoCAD software. Under such a circumstance, I found a great and unplausible job opportunity in the BMW Company with a higher salary as well as a prestigious job. It is obvious that if I did not get much experience in my field of study in the Tesla Company, I would definitely have not been able to find this great opportunity in BMW Company. The new opportunity helped me provide a fantastic life for my family as well.
In conclusion, taking into account the aforementioned reasons and examples, I am of opinion that if a person wants success and prosperity in the near future, he must take part in the community or find a part-time job in his spare time after school. This is because he will be able to become well-experienced in his position and find better opportunities in the future.
- Do you agree or disagree？ It is better to relax by watching a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise. Explain your answer with examples and specific reasons. 73
- TPO 36 3
- You have long been friends with someone. If they do something that you don’t like, should you still be friends with him or her? 73
- TOEFL T P O 32 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- Some people think the media including newspapers, televisions, radio and internet sources are less concerned about the accuracy of news. They think the information from the media is becoming incorrect. Do you agree with this opinion or not and explain why 85
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, whereas, in conclusion, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2621.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 540.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8537037037 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02856258942 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477777777778 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 854.1 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.4563834317 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.05 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178220213322 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0528250326883 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517582228828 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12316633748 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043852806507 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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