Describe one event of your country's history, and explain why it was important.Provide clear explanantions and details in support of your answer.
Among many significant historical events in a great country like India, the movement for remarriage of widows and the abolition of Sati Daha Pratha(wife's forced death after husband's ) are very important for me. It was the revolution for the upliftment of women's status in Indian society. The great person behind this movement was a social and educational reformist named Raja Ram Mohan Roy.
India is a multilingual country with diverse culture and religion. In ancient India, women were considered merely an animal to serve the men. According to the conservative belief of Hinduism, women d...
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