Many people would argue that the new technological advancements have made young one’s more smart than they were in the past. However, I disagree to this by claiming that nowadays children are less creative and immersed in their work as they were in the past which is elaborated in the following paragraphs.
Nowadays children spend majority of their time using television consoles and video games. They enjoy watching cartoon channels telecasted on television than going out to play with friends. In addition, there are a lot of video games which are very addictive. In the past the children would often go out to play outdoor games with friends. This will eventually enable them to develop social skills and conversational skills.
Secondly, the technology has made everything achievable at one’s finger tips. For instance, recent advances in the online food ordering services have made anything available at any time. Therefore the combined effect of television and fast food has made children more prone to obesity due to their sedentary lifestyle. As a result, there are a lot of children suffering from childhood diabetes. Traditionally, the children were not attached to video games, instead they would go out side have meetups. As a result, they have more opportunities to connect with their peers due to the lack of other entertainment options. This enhanced their mental as well as physical development of children.
Furthermore, today internet provides an overwhelming amount of information to kids that they may end up confused. Besides, they may not always be able to differentiate between right and wrong. They may not have enough knowledge to decide the right option for them and this would increase the chances of children to use inappropriate websites for their age. This can negatively impact the life of teenagers. In the past there was limited access to adult content. However, the present generation has abundant sources of websites available and their parents are often unaware of what the child is up to. It is always children the easy prey and unknowingly they fall into bad hands.
To conclude, technology has made life easy and comfortable to all of us. Yet, the children need to use it prudently or else they might have to suffer its inadvertent effects. Parents should monitor their child’s activities and make sure that they use their resources properly.
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Do you agree or disagree with
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past
Before tendering my opinion I guess it is crucial to take a quick glance at this argument on both sides. Although some people may hold the view that technology let children be less creative than in the previous years, Others believe that these days children are much smarter than before. From my own perspective, I concur with the first group who believe that technology let most of the children being uncreative. I have numerous reasons why I subscribed to a distinct attitude elaborating cogently in the subsequent paragraphs.
First reason coming to my mind consolidating my standpoint is that the children should know the technological detriment on their lives. Furthermore, many studies claimed that technology in this century let the children, in general, being distracted, additionally, the researcher and sciences improved the negative effect of technology by affecting the intelligence level of people especially children. One of the most important concepts poses the previous studies is smartphones, internet, social media and robots which they let the children being laziness and non-improvable. For instance, they could search for any kind of topics on the websites instead of reading books, novels or even attend classes or lectures.
Another reason which deserves some words, technology influences the children in really unhealthy ways by letting the percentage of loneliness increased within time and that will impact the children wellness. This will eventually enable them to develop social and conversational skills. In contrast to other children which they have limited access to technology because of their financial reasons, they are more socialized and they can share the knowledge, information, ideas with each other. I should mention that every notion and concept that every single child learns in life will gradually build his or her fundamental knowledge in the future.
Apart from the points I made above there is also another reason that I want to mention, nowadays the internet provides overwhelming information to kids and they may end up confused. Besides they couldn’t always recognize the right for the wrong information. Also, they don’t have enough knowledge to decide the right options for them, and this would increase the change to use inappropriate websites for their ages. However, the present generation has abundant sources of websites available and their parents are often unaware of what the child is up to. It is always children the easy prey and unknowingly they fall into bad hands.
To put it briefly, I strongly agree that technology makes our life much comfortable and easier than in the past. But the parents should monitor their children about what they are using technology and that’s can help them to improve critical thinking, and also breeds them better future in order that achieves acceptance in colleges. In a nutshell, in fact, there are the multiplicity of other factors supplementing the aforementioned statements, which could be alluded here, but are not embraced due to the dearth of time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2028.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79989668261 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55641025641 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1558703816 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.5 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.25 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211824529982 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588140539018 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490372829679 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135106159521 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065665683581 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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