Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the world.What are your opinions on this?
It is tought that the rising level of misbehavior and aggression in the migapolis around the globe, is due to the violent games that the younger people are playing with today. In the next paragraphs, we will discuss this opinion, and show other hidden reasons.
first of all, I think that it is true violent video games can trigger an aggressive reaction as shown by a lot of research studies. and especially that those games are affordable and accessible to all age groups. and there is no limitations or boundaries applied on that violent content developers. this wave of damaging reactions has been observed lately in my community among adolescents and children either toward themselves or others and there parents found that it was because of a game called blue whale.
But In the other hand I totally believe that there is lore reasons for that outrage linked with the social environment that those young people are living in such as being raised in a non stable and disturbed families or with alcoholic parents where they can be easily mistreated and punished for silly mistakes therefore this future generation grow up with a believe according to
those deep feelings gained from their childhood period.
In the end I strongly think that this is a serious problem that needs to be analysed from different perspectives, thus we can not blam only the video games while there is a deeper and covered psychological issues related to the environment that those kids have lived in.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, therefore, thus, while, i think, such as, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1241.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9246031746 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60545716324 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.626984126984 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 386.1 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 114.91348648 49.4020404114 233% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 155.125 106.682146367 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5 20.7667163134 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.75 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.67935871743 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157908093937 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060262380288 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338274181907 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0748048745589 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465741496223 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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