There has been considerable debate over the impact of technology on the lives of today’s generation. With the advancement made in every field, technology is also becoming more advanced day by day. Some people believe that the advancing technology has made children less creative compared to they were in the past but others feel the opposite. In my opinion, technology has made children more creative. I feel this for two reasons which I will expore in the following essay.
To begin with, technology has led to more exposure to creative ideas all over the world which encourages children to be more creative. With the use of Internet, children have access to diifferent creative ideas and views of other people which creates a desire in them to be creative so that they can also get famous as those creative poeple are. I can give a compelling example to illustrate this. My brother is doing his graduation in mechanical engineering in BIIT institute in Mumbai and he loves to design new cars. As he has access to view different creative designs of cars presented by other poeple all over the world, he also desires to design a car model which would be famous all over the world. Pursuing his dream, he works hard and tries to use his creative ideas so as to make a unique car model.
Moreover, technology has provided children with a platform where they can present their creative ideas to other people and this encourages them to be more creative. Nowadays, it is so easy for children to connect with poeple through Youtube, Facebook, Instagram, Television and Radio. They present their ideas over these platforms and if these ideas are liked by people, they feel more motivated and encouraged to more creative. I can give my personal example to support this. I have special love for paintings. I love to draw landscapes using different colours and different textures. I feel that I always had an ability to paint great landscapes using my creativity. So, after being supported by my friend, I uploaded a painting photograph on Facebook. The painting got so famous over a short period of time and was liked by many people. As a result, I even got my painting presented in a famous art gallery in my city. After this incident, I feel more encouraged to paint new landscapes and show my creativity.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that technology immensely encouraged children to be more creative. This is because technology has led to more exposure to creative ideas encouraging children to be more creative and because techology has provided them with a platform to present their creative ideas.
- TOEFL T P O 08 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends 60
- TOEFL T P O 10 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. 66
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 776, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ard and tries to use his creative ideas so as to make a unique car model. Moreover, tec...
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Line 3, column 512, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...his. I have special love for paintings. I love to draw landscapes using different...
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Line 3, column 586, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...fferent colours and different textures. I feel that I always had an ability to pa...
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Line 3, column 795, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...The painting got so famous over a short period of time and was liked by many people. As a resu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, as to, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2168.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88288288288 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71461339469 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441441441441 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 705.6 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5071679063 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3333333333 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256506876117 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0777750163017 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116287112886 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194484192362 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111816482894 0.0645574589148 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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