The statement presented looks like an average advertisement material and the points mentioned are not sufficient to support the recommendations of the author.
For someone to take a decision about joining their child to a school, the quality of teachers does play a vital role along with the quality of their curriculum. In the argument presented, Pirouettes has teachers who have danced in prestigious places around the world, but that does not provide any information about how they fared at such events like, how many events they have won or the kind of records they have set. It is possible that other schools of Elmtown have teachers who have a better track record. Without providing data that can compare the teachers of various ballet schools based on their track records, it is hard to take the recommendation with credence.
In the claim the author provides another information that their students have become professional dancers with top dance companies and without quantifying, it is hard to take the statement with credence because, the argument does not provide details about the ratio of students who were not placed, nor does it compare the placement details of other ballet schools in Elmtown nor does he mention about the pay difference which is offered to it's students based on the school's brand.
The word intensive gives an impression that the student would be trained to perfection, but such training may result in various physical injuries because, ballet is an art style that requires extensive physical and mental training and sometimes such training may result in injuries which may be permanent. The author must provide details that can compare other schools that offer similar opportunity or quality of teaching and their safety record to better support his recommendation.
In conclusion, the recommendation cannot be supported with the details provided.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 304 350
No. of Characters: 1558 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.176 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.125 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.673 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.778 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.589 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.398 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.733 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, may, so, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 304.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23684210526 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74202444572 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503289473684 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 117.690219026 57.8364921388 203% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 176.888888889 119.503703932 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.7777777778 23.324526521 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219408528811 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0873752956104 0.0743258471296 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726988440627 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0913294653214 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0995296326538 0.0628817314937 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 14.3799401198 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.3550499002 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.