Knowledge is a fundamental point for success in a future job. If you are a well-informed person, you would earn success in your job. some people think that for success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school, others disagree. In my view, it is better to study hard in school for two important reasons.
First, it creates other abilities including the relationship with others. If you study hard, you learn a lot of things that help you to improve your character and you are able to have a proper relationship with others. For example, when I was in university, I had friends who study a lot and he had a lot of information. He could talk well with others and everyone enjoyed to talk with him. This experience taught me that with a hard study we can improve our other abilities.
Second, without proper information, you can not succeed in your job. A person without knowledge cannot solve the problems and do the task given to him. For instance, I tried so hard in university and get authentic data wherever that I can to achieve. When I started my job in a factory which produces cars' parts, always I able to solve the problems. I am doing my job well and I find a solution for every single problem. From this, I learned that if you want to improve your job, you must attain proper information.
In sum, I think that it is better to study hard in school for two important reasons. Not only it creates other abilities including the relationship with others, but also without proper information, you can not succeed in your job. I believe that all of us must study hard in school to gain success in a future job.
- TOEFL T P O 21 - Integrated Writing Task 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 134, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...on, you would earn success in your job. some people think that for success in a futu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, well, for example, for instance, i think, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 22.412803532 223% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1380.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 306.0 270.72406181 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50980392157 5.08290768461 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58575011077 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454248366013 0.540411800872 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 425.7 419.366225166 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 3.25607064018 461% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.2673096003 49.2860985944 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.6666666667 110.228320801 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 21.698381199 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 7.06452816374 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 4.33554083885 323% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00874013902218 0.272083759551 3% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00429710068576 0.0996497079465 4% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0177174000113 0.0662205650399 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00580434796843 0.162205337803 4% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0100534255861 0.0443174109184 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 13.3589403974 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 53.8541721854 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.0289183223 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 12.2367328918 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.65 8.42419426049 79% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 63.6247240618 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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